Dune grass upon a stiff wind parries
as sand lifts from the hills
and makes rain sounds on
grey teak wood walking through.
Green whips upon sugar hold
their ground to witness the swell
of shy fire at the seam.
The slurp and cymbal of
sea water shares in the harmony
of the dune to a seagull chorus
faint over the waves.
Red-orange streaks the antique
rolled glass at the horizon.
The whitecaps applaud the dawn-
upright beings stroll, yawning
and gazing by the gospel of nature.
Footsteps fall under foam and
tumbling fragments of shells.
The sky light rises to witness
the subtle strokes of the shore line
and the volley of survival,
warming the skin of all creatures,
giving comfort and serenity.
And so the light paints the ball-
in rotation peace and inspiration
swell at the edges.
Earth smiles as dim light
waves hello and goodbye.
The chronicle of life
wrapped in the rosy buffer
between the delicate struggle
by day and the black speed of night.
What did you think
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the ocean brings wonder and love and your poem brought me back to the ocean and the smells and the wind and the colours and the birds
thank you
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A beautiful description so many sounds and images, who needs 3D movies, this is amazingly written I cannot resist to quote my favourite lines
"The slurp and cymbal of
sea water shares in the harmony
of the dune to a seagull chorus
faint over the waves."
Wow well done.
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the gospel of nature
better than being there... here?
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You fill the mind with intense images
that I want to hold tightly so as to imagine
the scenes again. Makes me want to reach
for pens and watercolors...
Superb----but with the care you take to craft
your pieces, I believe you realize that already!
Aesthete2000
M-C
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This is now one of my favorite sea poems I have read since I joined up with AP almost three years ago, and I have read a ton of them.
Of shy fire at the seam
The slurp and cymbal of
Sea water shares in the harmony
Of the dune to a seagull chorus
Faint over the waves
Red-orange streaks the antique
Rolled glass at the horizon
The whitecaps applaud the dawn
Does free verse get any better than that? I absolutely love reading about the sea, so this transported me to the most tranquil places I have ever been throughout my 39 years. I will be reading this many more times, I'm sure. This is one of those pieces that I can read again and again, and find something new and exciting at any given spot of the poem. I watch my favorite movies several times for the same reason. I absolutely loved reading it. I hope to see a gold trophy on this, because it really deserves one or two.
Don
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nice poetry somber and quiet , maybe it is just my mood, I like this.
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Beautiful, I love the imagery, you paint a lovely picture with your words. I too am baffled that this has not won any trophies. It is brilliant.
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this is excellent however i feel like there is nowhere to take a breath! if this were spaced out a little I would certainly embrace this amazingly brilliant read
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Ya know? I agree, I have been meaning to fix the capitalization and space out "The Rosy Buffer." I'm a big 'ol procrastinator. Seeya and thanks for the thoughts.
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I lOVE the way you describe the scenery and nature in this piece. It takes you there , it's dangerous and peaceful at the same time. Your very talented
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I thought the imagery wonderful, the flow unbroken replicating that natural glorious world.
The diction is an inspiration,"stiff wind parries" is a delight. L4, 5,6,7.I liked particularly.
"slurp and cymbal" wow really do work."streaks the antique " nice internal rhyme, the alliteration is very talented as is the entire poem. The imagery keeps the reader glued, liked your poem a lot thank you.
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I second that...?
why this has not trophies is dumbfounding???
Flow matches the subject and imagery is very cooool. Alas, sometimes we write masterpieces for our eyes only....Beautiful piece. -
I am rather shocked and disappointed that this very lovely poem with wonderful imagery has yet to be rightly recognized with a trophy as yet. A terrific piece that was a real pleasure to read and ponder.
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such imagery, beautiful flow Steve,
you are a awesome poet.
blessings
Rend
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very beautiful....lovely imagery
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I enjoyed this very much, I particulary liked:
The slurp and cymbal of
Sea water shares in the harmony
Of the dune to a seagull chorus
slurp and cymbal what a wonderfully complex phrase.
The only thing I would consider would be "upright beings" to my mind that gave a speculative tone to the lines.
hope this helps -- d
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Such a nice look into nature. Very beautiful. I love nature personally, it's very relaxing. Nice ending, sums it up well. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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WOW
This is really REALLY good!!!!
What speaks to you when you write these words? When you close your eyes in a meditative way? This is more beautiful than words alone. Reading it makes we want to read it again & again...
& then to sit down & write.
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Thanks for the nice words on this one. It is one of my favorites. I was hoping the feeling translated.
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Majestic walk before the Dawn...
What a wide view of the world you gave me in these few entwined lines, depth captivating a sensual beauty. Delightful read the words embraced and carried me through a most memorable walk from twilight til the dawning of a bright new day. I loved the feel of sea-foam caressing my feet and crushed bits of shell as they crunched gently around my toes ... the song of the seagull...lullaby of each lapping, rushs of the receding wave. Well done - I loved it ...Pure Gold.
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Such a delicate write.
Your words so calming and harmonious when read. Brings back memories of walking down the beach at sunset.
Great job!
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oohhh your write makes me feel, smell and sense everything thats in the woods-- awesome job here!! the chronicle of life!! being a very true good line!!
I love where you took this prompt all the best for the contest huni x
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awesome imagery, and, very breathtaking.
thank you for entering, and best of luck to you
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yes you are right. i did enjoy this. and its because you have beautiful images. it leaves you kinda breathless if you read it out loud, because there is not much room for a pause. not sure if that was deliberate or not, but it works either way.
loved
And so the light paints the ball
In rotation peace and inspiration
Swell at the edges
Earth smiles as dim light
Waves hello and goodbye
The chronicle of life
this poem has a wholesome feel. nice work.
Emma
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This is just utterly gorgeous - a bookmark for certain. Thank you. No more to be said.
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Much Thanks
I fear I am a bit sappy, but each time I read this one my eyes well up and I'm not even sure why.
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