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Together We'll Rise Above It All

 

 

 

Put your worries aside for a minute 

look into my eyes and tell me

what's going through your mind

 

don't let other people sway your decision

if you love me as much as you say

prove it to me in every way

 

our families have their own opinions

everybody wants to rule the world

but it's up to us to pull away

 

let's be honest with each other

the color of our skin shouldn't matter

love is a powerful emotion

 

one that we can't control

we never could even as kids

we've always been the best of friends

 

we've changed each other's lives

in so many wonderful ways

we should not have to set a limit on love

 

let's take our relationship to the next level

become a family and leave this all behind us

because in the end it will only be you and me

 

no one else matters and I know

that as the years go by

we'll have our share of problems

 

but we'll learn to get through them

we'll find a way to stay in love

because we always have in the past

 

you entered my life like a gentle sigh

a quiet breeze blowing softly through my world

you decorated my life with the colors of your heart

 

you never let me down and deep inside

I know that our love will keep us together

our friendship has always been our foundation

 

it is something so precious and true

one that I will never take advantage of

I love you more than you could ever know

 

within my heart and in my mind

you have always been the one that I turn to

and let me reassure you can count on me too

 

as I stand here before you on bended knee

I want you to know that I am willing to sacrifice

I will do whatever it takes to make you mine

 

you are the reason that I wake each day

your name is written all over the walls of my heart

and I treasure every moment that we spend together

 

please take this ring and promise

that you'll spend the rest of your life with me

let me hold you close to my heart

 

together we will rise above it all 

and in time they will learn to accept us

this is our life and our choice

 

we owe it to ourselves to be happy

with every breath that I take each day

I am going to make you know how much I care

 

I have always loved you and I always will

so please hold me and look into my eyes

open up your heart and soul to me

 

let's not waste another moment in worry and fear

as I hold you and touch your heart

there is one thing that I have to know

 

will you marry me?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

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  • Ken-Maverick
    September 20

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    A very shaweeet write indeed,
    the emotions shone through your words.
    And i liked how you ended it all with that question.
    All the best to you.

    Ken


  • Maggie Kay gold member
    June 18

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    "you entered my life like a gentle sigh
    a quiet breeze blowing softly through my world
    you decorated my life with the colors of your heart"
    this is such a beautiful heart felt piece. your emotions soo strong throughout
    this piece made me feel at peace, the flow was just brilliant
    over all a great piece
    keep it up
    kmp


  • PhoenixFaith
    June 12

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    Aww so cute and beautiful. Imagery is great and I really like how you ended it with will you marry me. Very cute.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering.
    Kate

  • this is just so wonderful! it's absolutly beautiful. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.


  • etoile
    June 8

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    this is a very touching write. it is wonderfully written, and I really liked it a lot. it's beautiful.

    goodluck and thanks for entering

  • Thank you and good luck

  • A wonderful write here that speaks from the heart and soul. How true, it only matters what the two of you feel, for others seem to want to destroy what they can't have. Sometimes that's love and happiness. Thanks for sharing, and I wish you all the best, always, brother Timothy.

  • Beautiful! I absolutely loved this! Deep and heartfelt. You have an amazing way with words! Such a wonderful way you write! I love it!

  • Maggie Kay gold member
    May 16
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    Brought teeaarrs to my eyes. such a beautiful heart felt piece.
    One of the best i have read in a long time. Deffinatly a change to heart break
    just loved it


  • Rose Angel gold member
    May 13

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    Oh my, is that what you were getting at...I thought it was an appeal for tolerance....Quite a twist...Artfully done!


  • Kathraina silver member
    May 12

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    Sigh, lovely job with this piece.
    There is such strenght, love, and determination here which I believe true love should have. Marvelous write!


    ♥ Kate

  • awww, jeremy, this is so sudden [smile] your words always are a pleasure to read. they are very captivating and hypnotizing and fill the air, page and AP with such delight and new adventures of such sweet love.


  • Antebellum
    May 11

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    "let's be honest with each other

    the color of our skin shouldn't matter

    love is a powerful emotion"

    My favorite lines.
    This is so true.

  • A very touching write. Gender, nor color, should make a wrong factor when it comes to love. There is so much discrimination in this world.. and it makes me sick. I smiled when I read this, I liked the hope you displayed, as well as determination. My favourite lines have to be these:

    "as I stand here before you on bended knee
    I want you to know that I am willing to sacrifice
    I will do whatever it takes to make you mine"

    Reminds me of the saying "Love knows no boundaries." And to be honest, you portrayed that in this write.

    Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    May 10

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    WOW! This is such a sweet poem and so true, love goes beyond color of skin. It is ashamed how too many people let that become an issue and ruin great relationships! You have penned a wonderful write here, my friend!!!

    Best of luck,
    ~Raven

  • HUGE GROUP SIGH>>>>>>>>

    ahhhhhhhhhhhh.....can we all marry you!
    ears/Seattle

    lovely, lovely...what a lucky gal!
    perhaps your walk in closets has
    room for all of US!
    gigggle.


  • Denerica
    May 5

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    Love one another, He shed the same blood we all have. Brilliant write, that needs to be shared. Blessings

  • This is a beautiful poem, a truly pleasure to read. You've showed us the essence of love here. Only that feeling is important, not race, religion or every other difference that might exist.
    Well done!
    Nela

  • OH MY LORD... was this an actual wedding proposal... wow! I hope she accepts. And I so loved this writing of yours. Sounded so much like what you would really say to someone you love. And how you would speak to them to get them to understand what is good and right in your world.

    I hope she said Yes! Great as usual. I love the way you write.

  • This is so amazing. Not marrying anyone...lol! This was a ''wow'' proposal and write. Emotions expressed throughout the whole write without skipping a beat. Thank you for the entry...

  • I will have to say that is probably one of the deepest proposals I have ever read. Way to put your heart in to it as you have expressed your emotions well. Good luck in her contest!

    Ted E

  • now i am blown away!

    what a awesome write! and filled with so much love! you have a romantic heart, and it spills from your heart to your pen, I am in awe!
    and maybe a little "J" lol
    Blessings

    Rend

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