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Tell Me It's Okay

I knew a boy once with eyes full of humour,
I fell in love quickly; in lust even sooner.
But there was an accident; you're gone forever -
now I need to know it's okay for me to love again.

I've met another who loves me and sings for me,
he'll whistle a tune or he'll write me a symphony.
So send me a dream or a dozen black roses -
just please tell me that it's okay for me to love again.

I spent weeks upon weeks just sobbing the day away,
couldn't believe that you'd gone and you'd stay away.
But I've got no more tears left in me to cry now -
so won't you tell me it's okay for me to love again?

I've met another who loves me and sings for me,
he'll whistle a tune or he'll write me a symphony.
So send me a dream or a dozen black roses -
just please tell me that it's okay for me to love again.

I couldn't ask for a better heart-fixer,
his touch is like fire; his kisses, elixir.
But you were my first love, my life and my dream -
so you need to say it's okay for me to love again.

I've met another who loves me and sings for me,
he'll whistle a tune or he'll write me a symphony.
So send me a dream or a dozen black roses -
just please tell me that it's okay for me to love again.

Just please tell me that it's okay for me to love again...

Author notes

Alrighty... so just in case this isn't clear. This is a song about a girl, who thought she was going to be with someone forever... but then he died. And after a while... she falls in love again

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    July 15

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    Wow. This is such a great poem. It's beautiful but it's sad.

    Improv: Tell about the first boy a little bit more?

    Favorite lines: I knew a boy once with eyes full of humour,
    I fell in love quickly; in lust even sooner.

    Those lines really did strike me.

    I disagree with my other judge, I give this a 10 out of 10.

    Great write!


  • Brand
    June 30

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    A good piece of work, i think that it would work well as a song and i love the rhyme

    I don't really have any criticism other than that i think the song format actually takes away from some of the emotion possible with this piece.

    My Favorite Lines:

    I couldn't ask for a better heart-fixer,
    his touch is like fire; his kisses, elixir.
    But you were my first love, my life and my dream -
    so you need to say it's okay for me to love again.

    These capture the difficulties of moving on after losing one you care about.

    I give you a seven out of ten.

    Good luck in the contest






  • individuality gold member
    June 5

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    love and life and loss and death, they all sigh together at times, a good piece, i might pogo to it later


  • JeremyWilliams
    May 27

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    Judges Verdict

    Great job it had real good flow and if i decide to use it i will make a recording some day, it will not be a professional one lol im just a small time singer thanks for the entry and best of luck to you

    • DramaQueen469 gold member
      May 27
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      LOL, I don't need professional; I play these songs myself and I'm always really interested to hear others' interpretations of them
      Thankyou for commenting!

      Maria


  • DreamtSong-x
    May 19

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    This is a beautiful piece, there are no words to describe how much I loved reading this. It was a huge pleasure, you're extremely talented. (:

    -- Tor


  • Vintage Chiffon
    May 12

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    Awe. This was amazing. I could see these more as lyrics and it definitely touched me. I thank you very much for entering this in my contest and I wish you the best of luck .

    damien


  • KyleBerg gold member
    May 6

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    This would make such an amazing song..
    I almost cried reading this... the emotions are just so strong..
    Thanks for allowing me the privelege of reading your brilliance.


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    May 2

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    Excellent

    yes you can love again, but only if you do it for real, the thoughts flow together, and leads to a great conclusion. there were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one

  • xXbrokenNtornXx
    May 1
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    I love this poem it is very powerful


  • Maggie Kay gold member
    May 1

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    Great lyrics. You write it your self or is it based on another song?
    I liked it and many people can relate to this for most people ask these same questions and want the same answers. I loved it full of emotion with a good flow. Would be a great piece if recorded


    • DramaQueen469 gold member
      May 1
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      Thanks so much for your comment!! Definitely wrote it myself
      and I will record it... eventually...

      Maria

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