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Greek Myth Remix: Looks Like You Didn't Make It

Yeah...I know the stars in heaven shine real bright
But...will you be alright in the noise without the lights?
Going down...
Past the endless afternoon
Looks Like You Didn't Make It
I guess they don't have much room

You had a husband
And a love you were supposed to have
But you became a lost soul
And they go somewhere else
A place where the daylight don't last

Once my reality becomes yours
There's no going back
You can lose your mind here
And that'll be that

There will be other things that will go missing too
Like the books that you want to read
That candle will go out
When the eyes start to bleed

The others will be missing you
But their words...you won't hear
Those wishes and prayers won't be recognized here
For six months out of the year

You can sway in the wind's breeze
And dance with your mother's trees
But when six months are up...Persephone
You'll be back down here with me
I’ve come to love you too much
And now I can finally dream

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  • darkyinsoul
    April 30

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    Vivid imagery
    The third stanza is well penned
    I can relate
    Thanks for the share
    Darky