The earth descends upon me
Like a cloudy black spiral
of horrible nightmares
It captures me and takes me down
to the lonesome grave
from which I came
It devours me
from the inside out
yet it still feeds on nothing
Im an empty bottle
I am numb from the pain
cut me with a razor
and I wont feel a thing
Friends whom surround me
Cover me up with a sheet
I am hidden from my mistakes
but my mistakes are not hidden from me
Those who try to save me
leave me with only guilt
for I know that they dont deserve
the pain that they get
from my insanity
I love this gruesome world
Love how it bleeds and wilts
But this world rubs off on the broken
and the broken
only kill themselves
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- Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache by Reaper-117.
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I love this gruesome world
Love how it bleeds and wilts
But this world rubs off on the broken
and the broken
only kill themselves
those are the best lines in the poem.
I loved the imagery here, and the bitterness.
Thanks for entering. -
I felt my eyes watering up...this is very moving and so true. <3
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Strong emotion
wilting rose
We are all a bit insaine
Well done imagery
Thanks for the share
Darky
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Paralyzing concept of the agonies of life. The lines, I'm an empty bottle numb from pain is especially metaphoric and powerful. A naked look at the world and the down side.
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Superb
Intense and very strong message in this poem, I truly feel your anguish as I read this for who is perfect out there in the end?
Some nice rhymes and overall a very interesting read, I really enjoyed it and thanks for sharing.
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