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Senses

    Smell
wheat fields grown in summer
          Feel
tiny whiskers sticking out
              Hear
the birds fly down to feed

    Smell
raindrops on a dirt road
          Feel
soft earth between toes
              Hear
water drip from each leaf 

    Smell
pine needles on forest floor
          Feel
dampness of the air
              Hear
cones falling from the trees

    Smell
the scent from a lover
          Feel
his hands caress your face
              Hear
whispers of forever

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  • abu nuwas
    October 27

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    Obedient...

    .... to those 'rules' about appealing to all the senses, and well done. No sign of French blood in your veins: 'first ze eye, zen ze nose, and zen ze palate!' I could not really get the end, for obvious reasons.


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    May 12

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    Oh my

    this left me with the most wondrous of 'sense' feelings. This drifts & lifts so gracefully & leaves one with a sense of inner peace. Thanks for this. My spirit is enlivened now & I can do something difficult...get out to my therapy!


  • contess
    May 8
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    very delicate,,beautiful imagery,,extremely creative


  • Sunkissed xo
    May 6

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    This is beautiful.
    A breath of fresh air..
    Amazing imagery


  • Celtic Legend
    May 3
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    wow that's really cool!


  • Beret55 silver member
    May 3
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    Thats good. I liked it. Well done


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    May 2

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    Smell
    the scent from a lover
    Feel
    his hands caress your face
    Hear
    whispers of forever

    such a beautiful write..
    I love the style you used
    the picture protrays your words
    like magic on a page..
    Thank you for sharing your beautiful words
    Hugss Angel♥


  • pinksnowboots
    May 1
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    Aww, I love this! I love how you used the senses in the poem in relation to the picture!

  • piccola silver member
    May 1

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    rain on a dirt road, dampness in the air; two of the most incredible images. Very appealing to the senses. Water dripping from wet leaves ... reminds me of autumn which I love. Wonderful job. Thank you


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 30

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    wow this took me back to my child hood too. and yesterday pines wet earth cones the lot thank you a time of great simple pleasures a beautiful piece


  • Selithia
    April 30

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    rain on a dirt road is one of the most beautiful smells. I thought this was amazing.

    avec amour,
    Selithia ♥

    • AllexisReed
      April 30
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      Thank you so much. I was driving home yesterday and caught the smell of rain through my window and was taken back to my youth where I would walk a dirt road in the pouring rain and feel the dirt beneath my feet. Those memories will always be the best!

      I love your AP name. What does it mean? So beautiful

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