I've been trapped here in this cage
until your love shattered lock and key
now I'm free from hells enrage
only the light of your face I see
lips etched of perfection
sensually speak unto my heart
gently caressing my soul
while whispers give to spark
your lips entice with beauty
to seduce my very being
opening to invite my breath
that my heart is pounding, beating
igniting loves desire
of flames that dance in dreams
entangeled in loves illusions
where nothing is as it seems
take my hand and follow near
I'll Lead you with temptations fate
that lead into the depths of heaven
for the joy of our soul illuminates
lost in sweet disillusioned worlds
Where joy finds peace each day
I need not worry where I follow
your heartbeat always guides my way
so hold me close in these arms of yours
and love me far beyond,the key to heavens doors
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Flawless.
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Sounds like perfect love to me. I admit I got swept up in these words and the dreamy feel within these words. I loved it from beginning to end. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Beautiful, a peaceful write, even if this about a cherished love, my spiritual awakening tells me here that we can also take this as the love we have from the All Mighty God. Excellent. Blessings.
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beautiful full of sensual softness very nice
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this is very deep and moving
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Hmm....beautiful, yes. I did like it...but at times it seemed a bit...reduntant, or maybe a few words used too often, I am not sure. But something felt too oft used. I cannot quite pinpoint it, I wish I could, and advise you, because I definitely like this.
Regardless, great rhyme, great form. Both definite thumb's up. And I especially liked the play on the title. I didn't expect that at all. Very tastefully sensual, something I have a deep appreciation for.
Good luck!
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I exchanged a few words I used to often, I think it reads better now wont you please take the time to re read
thank you for the wonderful comment! 
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Yes, i would say it reads much better....espeically after coming back a reading it a second time helped, also. A definite improvement...!
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An absolutely beautiful love poem. It had a sweetly satisfying erotic feel, as well. I thought this was amazing.
Avec amour,
Selithia ♥
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