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Valley Dreams

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In the green valleys that I wander in,
beside Welsh mountains where I long to be,
kin of mine shall meet with ancestral kin,
freely in the valleys where I am free.

Legend told in verse the way of legend,
kings and princes battled with English kings,
endless dream that portend the daylight's end
sings of love as the heart of beauty sings.

Dreamy thoughts of love can fill my daydream,
courting the eye of one who has me caught,
stream the babbling voices of mountain stream,
sort the first moment when my dreams she sought.

Here in my valleys, a heart's song to hear,
peer into me and in my dreams appear.




JF 29 April 2009

 

 

Author notes

Form Notes: Shadow Sonnet

Prompt:

If a man should sleep on Cader Idris, he shall wake up mad or a poet' --- Welsh Legend

'I knew i was mad, now I know why!' --- Jem

Photography --- Cader Idris by Jem Farmer

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  • PerVirtuous
    June 2

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    This may be one of the finest examples of a shadow sonnet I have witnessed. I am impressed, pleased and awed. Thank you for entering. You have made judging this contest difficult but enjoyable.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19

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    Beautiful depth of placement and of sentiments.

    Loved this write. I can see why you are leading finalist.

    Love
    Myra


  • PerVirtuous
    May 16
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    Straight to the finalist's list. Thank you for your wonderful entry.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 2
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    You slept on the Cader? That explains a lot!

    Nicely wrought.



  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    April 30

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    Hey Sis, both the poem and the picture are stunning. The reflection in your sonnet is mirrored by the reflection in the lake.

    This is beautiful and I'm glad I came to read this, thank you

    Love Suz


  • maralisa silver member
    April 30

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    aw this is very beautiful I love this and the background thank you for sharing maralisa


  • XLadyElinorX
    April 30

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    this is one of the better shadow sonnets I have read. . .lovely and well done, poet.

    ♠ Lady Elinor


  • Amera gold member
    April 30

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    I love this as you knew I would. You have uses the power of the Shadow sonnet to create the majesty and flow of the dreams created in the Welsh mountains. This is a difficult form but you have made it your own as the shadowed words are not redundant but actually add to the magic and imagery. I'm thrilled to put this in my list.

    Love,
    Amera♥

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