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Small Action...Know Well

Scheming the demise
of those who think
they are above us all

Planning and plotting
lies fill empty conversations
friends telling secrets

Betraying those who trusted
in empty friendships
having faith in the lies

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Written December 3rd, 2003

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  • shastadaisey123
    April 8, 2004
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    "betraying those who trusted in empty friendhsips" great line , gteat writing ...write on ..I will read

    shastadaisey123


  • Poetic LieSins
    March 13, 2004
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    Wow. I loved the sound in this one. The rhythm was slow, as I read it, and that played a very good part in the poem itself. This is one of the best sound poems I've seen on this site. My favorite line HAD to be "lies fill empty conversations." Wonderful job here, and thanks for sharing!

  • AudienceOfOne
    March 13, 2004
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    Good job!

    I see anger......... Nice!