Ambling through the torrid sand
In the middle of nowhere sweating incertitude
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Tranquility for my desolate soul
Bearing my exuberance in the palms of my hands
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To place it where it was before
Instead walking away desensitized
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My only felicity
To dry up in the desert sun
Author notes
I do not claim the picture used with this write as my own. Picture found on msn live images.
A contest entry
- Anything goes by JessicaMarieLewis.
700 points, ended May 6, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the way you set this piece up. it's different. your words are deep. Keep on penning hon!
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wow, this is different, filled with powerful sadness and great penning.
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aaahhhhhhhhh,,,
such sadness ,,,,, soooo well penned,,, ANOTHER beautiful example of you wonderous talent,,, great addition to your growing list of written poems,,,, your ability to write soooo many different styles is envyable -
it is hard somtimes.
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this poem is good. Its difrent. I have never read a poem in this format.
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Very sad write sweetie, we all go through times like this, we just have to keep looking for the positive and it will pass.
Love Ya
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Oh wow,
I thought I had read this, but apparently now...but so glad that I stopped by too. THis is very deep (very) I enjoy Poetry such as this, that leaves the mind wondering what ever happened...u know?
Great imagery, and form.
All the best,
Ephiphany
Oh, thanks for the compliment on my page
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very sad
you must be going through some thing tough very strong sad emotions i love it
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I like this piece for its quiet reflection; its wondering tune and its searching mood. An artistic shaping of it too in the impacting format you chose for it. Short and effective - not so easy to pull off.
AsIThink...
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pretty cool better than my ass lmao i like this i think you did a very great job with this here my love i only came on for you ty
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wow
popwerful imagery, sad story..but deftly penned..a serious departure from you normal arena but excellent all the same my friend, i hope this is just your creativity and not true sadness from you personally..
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excellent
Aww, this is great. So very well expressed. Thank you for sharing.
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Such a sad heartfelt write. I beleive you reached deep down inside yourself to write this one sweetie.
Wonderful
Laura
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Poignant
My dear, you give the reader much
to reflect on. Our lives are a collection
of seasons. Sometimes we waunder
aimlessly in the wilderness of our being.
Searching for that oasis to fill the void
in our lives. Beautifully written my friend.
Bravo
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sweating incertitude
marvelous !!!
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There is something very serene about this piece, in the sense that it reminds of being free from the stress after making a hard decision, whilst there is still tumult and unrest around, at the centre of it you feel peaceful as your mind is made up.
Good write.
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WOW aunty!!this is really good and in a cool form too!
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Thought provoking. What a read this one is. You really said a lot with so few words here. I love it... I love the way you set this up also, make the reading more interesting. and gives the read, the added depth... Great job!
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Nice job. I like the way that the vertical words set up the horizontal lines. It is an interesting composition.
Mike
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