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Let Them Run

Heavens a powerful lie
Showing the wounded a place to hide
Born through men
To satisfy the fear of death
The lie previously agreed
Is a void..
Beyond the dark star filled sky
There harbors a lie
Beyond the last breath
Lies are confessed
Let men run free
Into the lies they concieved

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  • autarky
    June 13

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    i like the confidence here; this poem is aggressive and almost bitter. and i really like the title -- my favorite of the entries in this contest. thanks for entering!


  • drifting cloud silver member
    May 7

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    Just reading poems in a contest we share.

    Cleverly worded using the word 'lie'.
    hmm... I wonder, is it a lie that we are spirit or a lie that we are bodies?