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A Flâneur Memory of Studio #105

Many had left the studio
sailing away smoothly,
hiding their outcomes,
but one dared to lower
his two shining blue banners
and allowed the flag of shame
to fly high upon his mast
in an unforgiving sea.

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    May 2

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    This is an interesting interpretation of the prompt, I realy enjoyed the air of this one. Best to you in the contest