I promise I'm not crazy,
My mind is just a bit hazy.
After facing all the hardships of this world.
Sometimes I may cry and scream,
But I'm not the man it seems!
Its just sometimes my thoughts get jumbled up and swirled.
I first thought that I must be wrong,
But I am not mentally strong,
And my realizations swept me right off of my feet.
I could not bear this any more,
This small wound has become a giant sore!
And it is still throbbing even as I lie underneath my sheets.
I realized we're coming to an end,
This message I MUST send!
But I seem to be at an absolute loss for words.
I can tell that I mutter.
I find my words tumbled and sputtered.
This horrible sickness has rendered all life absurd.
If I can not contact you with my speech,
Then to your hand I will have to reach.
Tug it gently and meet your gaze with a painful look inside my eyes.
"Don't fall for it!" says my gaze.
"Our time has come into a dark phase!"
He looks into them, but only collapses down and cries.
I guess it's time for me to go,
For here I'm only the lowest of low.
Ahead of me, I see a marvelous door.
I open it into a great abyss,
I jump inside knowing I won't be missed.
Darkness slowly reaches into my core.
I slip away into the black,
It was once just sanity that I lacked.
But now I close my mind's eye, and lock it shut.
I hope that you're mentally stronger,
Hopefully it will take longer,
For you to realize just what had made this man a nut.
Author notes
This is NOT about me. lol
Enjoy?
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A very interesting write you got here; I love how prismatic this write is since it can make you giggle, be sympathetic and be tugged into the dark side.
Great rhymes you got here with a form I haven't tried- aab ccb and all that.
All in all, I do like this poem- from witty to intriguing
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forgot to leave applause
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i loved it mah man
me n me friend thought this poem was good mitchell, it was extremely nice me man. we loved t. what inspired you? this poem is extremely inspirational. i did think your other poem was career worthy, as is this one. i shall leave you a comment on each of yours, thank you for them comment too. someone that i respect as much as you do from your works, that means a lot to me. keep up the wonderful work mine friend. -
hey, this is quite intense... expresses a pain of being disabled of action by fear of rejection or reprisal of some sort that would send him spirraling into his despair with heightened momentum, maybe. atleast he has tried to communicate his intentions. i can be quite self conscious myself... often make a fool of myself when i forget i'm self conscious.lol
well done for supporting this person and trying to empathize with the cause of his suffering. Very Good Write
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wow really good what sort of poem is this? at the moment im writing some jumbly things and i dont even think its a type of poem, so im trying to learn what types of poems there are. im so silly. but then again, i have only ever written around 5 poems in my life before so ha i have an excuse HELP.
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i think it is very good keep up the great work
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Absolutely Perfect Write! The twist and turn of thought, not of insanity though some might view it as such. I see a young man crying out and reaching out for anyone who might be willing to take a chance. I too have been that young man!
Well understood!
In God's Love
Three Doves
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This is a nice poem. I like the meaning and it sounds a bit hippyish (lol) and I like the last line the best, my sister laughed though...
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Thanks for the comment.
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