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Depressing Fat

Sitting in front of the television
Stuffing my face with potato chips
Almost like I’m getting double vision
To see those chips go to my hips

I don’t understand why it’s happening
I don’t eat the McDonald’s fatty foods
I hate this relentless fattening
That keeps me from feeling like the cool dudes

How can I deal with this?
I have tried most everything
Diets, calories, it all has missed
The mark that I need to hit

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  • piccola silver member
    May 1

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    Welcome! I'm from the group The Library. Please feel free to join. I am also in a group Healthy Choices Support Group. We try to support each other with weight issues and so forth. It's a great group too. I really like the write. Nice rhyme.

    p.s. my granddaughter works at Chuckie Cheese LOL

  • Welcome to AllPoetry!

    I know, right?

    And I work at Burger King...

    I really love this poem, what a statement on society today. WELL DONE on a great start, my friend!!

    I hope that you come to enjoy this site as much as I do, and in the meantime if you have any questions at all please don't hesitate to ask me!!

    Best of luck with your future writing,

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