As I look out at the nature around me,
The careless birds and ducks moving around,
Avoiding the stressed, hurried college students
Going through their days,
I turn around
And I see your big eyes fixed on me.
I stare back, somewhat confused and scared.
What are you looking at me for?
Are you going to attack?
Do you want to get closer?
You stand up and I stay still
As our eyes remain locked.
I turn back toward the lake
And when I face you again,
You scamper off.
I watch you move on to another girl
And wonder what that was all about.
Please tell me what you think
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Well squirrels look for nuts and if he passed you up for someone else I'd consider that a seal of approval that he didn't think you were one.
I like the poem because it was a bit unexpected, you made it seem like a person. I thought that was creative. Better a squirrel (if it was) than a bear I guess.
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wow. that was an unexpected ending. i wasnt expecting that at all.
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Haha ooohhhh Sonya...
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I don't know. It must be really hard on you. Lucky for me, I have never had to attempt it
<3
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Shouldn't you be doing school work and NOT making eyes at all the little critters...?
<3
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He was making eyes at ME.
And I had like...10 minutes to waste between classes. No point in starting school work
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at first i thought it was a boy...then i realized it was a squirrel. lol.
it was probably looking at how pretty you are.
good poem. nice use of language.
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Some of the language you use is a nice image of a man, you use the word, "scamper".
Almost like an animal, they are aren't they?
I have always viewed them as rabbits in headlights, personally.
Nice write!
Kind regards
Sophie
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It was a squirrel
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