I cashed my paycheck yesterday,
And spent every cent of it today.
Exactas.
Trifectas.
Win, Show, Place
& not a single dollar won
On this goddamn horse race.
To live in Kentucky
& never get lucky
Author notes
Prompt: Gambling
I have an addictive personality; I have only been to the racetracks three or four times and the first time I went I left with $80 extra in my pocket, however the next times were not so lucky haha but horse racing is still a great thing to watch.
A contest entry
- Gambling Quickie by Jfd.
500 points, ended May 13, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any suggestions?
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enjoyed the tone to this and the flow was great, you were able to take the word count restrictions and made it work, nice job
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awww sry u lost but good write
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lolz
this is good
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take advice from one obsessive to another quit now the longer ya leave it the harder it gets, hey nice write though, seriously , really strong pulled me in
bravo
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I have been a horse man for some years now. I have won more than I have lost, but still know the cost of a back of the pack runner coming up by a nose so I have nothing to show. Like this, but it is not my addiction. Though I promise you I understand. This was cute and a nibble behind the ear kind of reminder to laugh, move on but be aware.
Peace,
Tom B.
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exactly!!! move on but be aware...thats the point of this!!!!!
Im glad you understood it, your comment means alot to me
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One year I was in Kentucky just before the Derby, and I was sorry I didn't get to see it live.... The lines "To live in Kentucky / & never get lucky" made me chuckle. I'm not a gambler myself (I lost $18 once playing slots in Atlantic City, and that was enough for me), but my husband loves the thrill of the games. I think you've captured the flavor with the racing terminology—well done!
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hahaha i like this! bit sad obviously but i get a bit addicted to bingo when i go. even if i win a fiver, im hooked for the week hahaha great write on the prompt, and the authors notes add a personal touch to the wacky poem. : ) : ) : )
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lol........that was clever and wickedly fun!
witty too! sorry about your $80.00 (dang)
and Kentucky sure does breed some of the most
beautiful horses I have ever seen.
I stay away from the track too.....you know you
could feed that addictive personality by entering
poems and collecting trophies!
ears/Seattle
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well yes I love it here, but yeh I try to collect trophies...not so successful so far
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wow that sucks...gambleing is a horrible habit but i guess all of life is a gamble
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i love this. it puts me in mind of another poem called "slots" by gypsy via orleans. haha that's me. in any case your poem is good, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
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Excellent
I've never seen a horserace, maybe one day I'll go. A very fine write. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Left gambling in '75
got really tired of having no money in my pockets.
Good, fast write poet!
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good take on the prompt... i've only been to one horse race... i'm too scared to bet on anything not so lucky even if i'm irish... anyways awesome write.
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Good Write on the prompt!
In God's Love
Three Doves
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This was a really good write you have here, at least your not addicted to anything else. Thank you it was a pleasure to read.
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you caught on the prompt really well..the poem flows well too...
All the best in the contest!
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i like it
its something funky fresh
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nice poem i liked it. fortunately for me, i have the luck of the irish. I could make a career out of poker ..never been to the racetracks though. i don't know if i would trust my luck on that
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