Tonight may be tomorrow’s regret
takes me all day to try and forget-
(and God forgives, His mercy’s reset)
but even then, it’s lingering yet
one more sorrow as morning is met.
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Written March 20th, 2002
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Good read!
I enjoy rhyme and spiritual themes. Nice job. -
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lol, that was awesome, I greatly enjoyed that, and its very true!!! -
One of the things I like to do is read one of the latest things a poet has posted... and then read their first one posted.... You say you've revamped this one a bit, though. But as always your love of God and self are represented here just as much as in your later work.
In this one you've retold the old belief.... forgive and thy shall be forgiven. We need to forgive those who have sinned against us, even if it's ourselves doing the sin against us... perhaps only then can we believe God's forgiveness.
You did a great job withthe mono-rhyming. I've never been able to carry that off well enoughto post one.....yet
Love and
Dee
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Deep!
Auntie but how can we be for sure God Forgives the things we do? Anyway this was very deep...thanks for sharing it with us.
Kari -
That was gorgeous. Very haunting, I loved it.
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This poem is very true. Many people know what they are about to do but it doesn't dawn on them until it's over with that it was a mistake. Afterwards is when they really realize what they did was wrong. Sometimes being in the heat of the moment isn't as enjoyable as it seems. Quite often, bad things come out of it. Great write.
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thank you for your sweet comment. Let me just say that as time has gone on, I am always editing. This, being the first posted at this site, has taken on many changes. The newer knowledge of rhyme, meter, and form has brought me to constantly hone and regenerate something that was once a rough possibility.
That is what poetry means to me and I can tell you are also seeking that perfection. Good for you! -
wow, you have so many wonderful poems, I have read some of yours today and left no comment, I feel they are too good and nothing to say but great job. when i came across this one i had no idea that it was your first, what a great start, it needs no work, it is just perfect once again. can you write one i can tell you how to fix just once??? I love to read your work, but i tend to feel inadequate to comment. your friend, tracy
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How very true nice write
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another great insightful poem :-)
I must say I have never heard of this style of poetry before but none the less you delivered a knock out blowing punch with this very insight filled poem :-) smiles Sincerely, Paul :-) -
This is profound and insightful. Beautifully penned with great wisdom. Thanks for sharing.
LIZ -
I like this, very...relentless is a good word for it. Isightful too, I guess.
Thanx for commenting on mine.
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This reminded me so much of one of the lessons I learned and now try to tell others " No matter who forgives us , we will not find peace until we have forgiven ourselves " and that seems to be a very hard thing to do. We are harder on ourselves at times then anyone else is
Your words were perfect what that lesson
Reenie
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Shows your love for Jesus !
My dear Aunt Cookie, Even through the sin you find (we) His mercy another day....as you know He loves you sweetie...This to me shows such a humble heart or sincere Spirit and love for the Lord that it burden your heart or be a concern for sin when it happens....E ven though you desire not to do it as we are human and going to cause we are in a fleshly body here on earth...But for the sin to bother you so.... It shows a love for Christ only a broken heart you have coming before Him in desire to do his will...
Cookie, this shows that sin bothers you and your desire to please yet a love for the Lord....It would sorrow your heart...Thisshows so much in few lines...abou t you and your releationshi p with the father and the love also He has your rhyme and flow are well in this....of presentation all state a clear message....O f the Lords love and your heart......I love U,
†Sherry †
Edited on Oct 14, 9:35 p.m. because ''. -
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very nice,i like this -
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sorry didnt finish the sentance! if u wanna look at it -
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very nice if u want to I have a poem that is called fly that is spiritual -
don't touch it!
I chose this one,cos I wanted to read first poem you posted at Allpo...I found it to be very nostalgic with great meaning,
nicely penned,
Joanna -
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I've seen you around Zach's page alot, i decided to stop in a have a peek. I like this one, I always try to read the first post first. I like it. =) I'm off to read more of you! -
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eep...mono-rhyme... takes talent! I really liked this! great job! -
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Thanks, I needed to read this. -
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i foget what the five line stanza is called. was the reuse of 'regret' because there wern't anymore rhyming words left that would work, or another reason? making use of mono-rhyme is extremely difficult... (you know i know, too) ...kudos to you for giving it a whirl. :) -
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Even though this is very short, it has a nice relentless rhythm to it, kind of like something gnawing at your brain, which I guess this is what it's about! -
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I liked this alot. -
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Simple yet so true. Great write. -
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the syllabic repetition accentuates the clarity of this write.
one question: did you intentionally begin and end with 'regret'?
personally, i'd like to see you replace one of those with something that carries the same meaning; word repetition in addition to the syllabic was a little heavy on the ear and i think you could achiece a blunt fluidity if you were to alter that just a tad. -
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The link worked! I thought it didn't but I must not have copied the whole thing.
Great poem. I like it -_^ -
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A very reflective piece. Short and to the point! -
Oh for the damage I have sustained,
That life be counted nothing gained,
But for the one no grave contained,
Who gave his life but yet remained,
Wihin this heart, his love has reigned......Tell em darlin. let your locve shine far and wide. -
very clever write! Nicely done!!
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i agree with the other comments. lots said in a short amount of time. very nicely done.
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yes indeed
a very nice ditty
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so much said with so few words. wonderful.
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It is life ! we regret and get into things every night and morning!In the absence of these two life ends!
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Good write.
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nice little ditty.
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Nam
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