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Dormi, Jesu! Mater Ridet

Baby Jesu, mother cradles thee.
In calm slumber, how can'st thou not be?
Infant, suffer Mary's gentle plea,
Thou sweet redeemer of iniquity.

Please tell me what you liked, didn't like, and how I should improve on my writing. I can't change this one because it's already set to music, but I need opinions. Thank-you all! x

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