You never came to me
Why is that
I thought I would hear your voice
Or see your image
Or feel your presence
But you never came to me
I believed in forever
Believed in the other side
I am an empath
I feel what some don't
what most can't
But you didn't come to me
In life it was so hard to forgive you
And in death all I want to do is know you
love you
touch you
have you touch my soul
But I can't conjure you
Or is it you that will not conjure me
Maybe I am not special enough
I was never enough to make you stop
killing yourself
I was never enough to make you happy
I am not enough to not be your legacy
And I like to think you are watching me
Like to picture you as my guardian angel
but I don't know
I can never tell the difference
between demons and angels
and you
you never came to me
so maybe angels don't exist...
JayLynn
Copyright 2004 All Rights Reserved
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I never believed death was so damn final. i am starting to get that idea.
Written March 9th, 2004
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what could I possibly say when every one said it. This poem has so many torn emotions. I loved it and I think its an kick ass piece, so amazing, and makes a person think. thanks so much. Amanda
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Great Piece!
I'll tell ya hun, as of late, I'm kinda thinking that eternal sleep sounds good, but what is, is what is, whatever that is, ya know? Oh, so much to look forward too, Umm, I think, who really knows for sure, not me, just me and my views, though I know that love helps me through, so that's what I'm going to do, as I love you, so there, and I hope you find some hope in that!
Keep on being you sweet soul, much love always!
-Timothy
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A very strong and intense write. I could feel your anguish and hear your cries.
I think this is how one might feel if they didn't believe in Jesus...but I am not sure, because I have never doubted His existence. It would be a horrible life if I didn't have my faith and know the He is there and life after death does exist. So to me, death is not final.
You did an AMAZING job with this sweetie. Though our beliefs are different, I will not deny that this is not an awesome write because it is!!! Very nice work!!
Sam
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Well JayLynn, yet another poem that shows your true talent. This one though, seems like a new style for you. It didn't feel familiar. Not that it has to because this piece is great. I completely know how you feel, but there is one thing that I've come to learn from all of my experiences, sometimes, not getting what we "want" is a much better gift than what we wanted could have ever been. Losing someone can be the hardest thing in life to deal with, trust me, I lost 13 of the closest people to me in a period of less than 2 years. You just have to look up, stay positive, and keep waiting, b/c you will see them again, but it won't be on this earth. Keep up the great work
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Hey this is great, a nice different perspective and very deep. I like the format, and the wording is excellnt, nice flow, and very well written. I am very sorry for your loss, but try to still look up, maybe angels do exsist, they just havent visited yoiu quite yet, you never know =]. Good luck
xxx delta -
Don't give up. There will be a sign, like Desire says. This is so sad to me. I love the poem. I will have to read some more of yours. I think you have talent. I really like the way you put your words together, so simply, and just tell how you feel.
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Very emptional, bittersweet..
I can never tell the difference
between demons and angels
and you
you never came to me
so maybe angels don't exist...
I loved:
"I can never tell the difference
between demons and angels"
Heartbreaking..
-Angel Tears -
Great write. I love the tone and everything. Nice job!!~
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you know, at first i didnt like this, but i read it again, and i decided that its actually pretty soulful. i ended up liking this poem a lot. good work.
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I had a hard time when my love passed away and believe it or not~Somehow a sign will come~It may be tiny but only you will know or a child~Children are so receptive~ My daughter talks to her daddy all the time~ It is amazing what he tells her that only him and I would know~
I am so sorry for your loss~
Wish you the best always~ Great release
big hugs and much love~Desire
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And in death all I want to do is know you
love you
touch you
have you touch my soul
But I can't conjure you
I can relate to these words..they touch me in wayz I cant explain
very well written..each word fit together beautifully -
hi twistedpisces,
,y opinion on your poem is that it is a great write, I feel you have put a lot of thought into this piece, if I may I have one suggestion, if I may, that is if you had a couple of question marks, at the end of each question. Apart from that well done, keep up the good work. -
i can totally relate to you on this! its like sitting in a room and begging for a sign...believing it will come..but not know what to look for...or if you already overlooked it...i dont know...but great job!
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Wow...beautiful, intriguing piece of work you have here.
I feel you, empath toooo.
The last line...needs to be tweaked somehow? But I loved this!
Some especially beautiful lines:
But I can't conjure you
Or is it you that will not conjure me
Maybe I am not special enough
I was never enough to make you stop
killing yourself
I was never enough to make you happy
Keep up the great work!
Hugs, peace, and love,
Jewel -
wow this is really good! And damn deep too!
good work, i like the style that you wrote this poem in..
it feels very uniqe... know what I mean?
nicely written!
Kayla -
Whoosh! This just comes out and hits you! Wow. This is really too deep to say much about. I liked the flow, this whole piece has a certain maturity to it that is nice and refreshing, if not sad and desperate as well. I'll just say i feel for you and leave it at that. Great write! Thank you for sharing it with us, we are priveleged.
Peace,
Lo
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Who knows. I prefer just not to think about it. If it is final, and we are gone forever. Then we are gone, and can't feel, and so can't realize we are gone and missing out on anything. And if there is something afterward, well, then there is. Its a great poem. the emotion in it is really strong. amazing writing. And good luck figuring it out, or coming to some sort of peace.
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