I blow it all
and yet you took me back
I gave up on us
you were going to college
I was still in high school
but you never gave up on us as friends
my mind told you were like a brother
but heart told me different
you said at one time you'd do anything for me
I pushed it aside
your heart so pure
your mind so loving
I'm so confused
I hurt you I thought
but you did not move
like an old oak tree in a storm
with its roots so deep
you believe in yourself
you believe in me
why dont you give up on me
I'm so ordinary
so plian
a geek
a book worm
that never mattered once to you
you are my strength
I say I blow it all
but you say I made it better
what was your first love like
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capturing.. .well done
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Aww , beautiful , eloquent & capturing !
This poem flows gracefully throughout ,
VERY well executed .. Thank you !
Best Wishes , Friend Easy
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Very beautiful and emotional!
It's a wonderful feeling to have someone in
your life that never gives up on you. I think
that we all need someone like that and to
have that person in your life is a blessing in
itself. Wonderful work here and thanks so
much for sharing it with us all! Take care and
keep it up!
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Beautiful write, full of so many heartfelt emotions. Wonderful job I liked this a lot!
Blessings,
~Michaela~ -
great work.
good flow for a non rhyming piece
you really have spilt it all out on the page and i love it. Spelling errors arnt a biggy we all no what your meaning.
My first love? it was hard i guess. The fact he was one of my best friends didnt help just seemed to make it worse, cos all i could think was i dont wana hurt you when we break up.
very deep personal piece that really touched me
keep it up
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Welcome To Allpoetry
A couple of misspellings: collage=college, strangth=strength...and you need to capitalize your I's!!!
Other than these few minor errors, you ahve penned your emotions really well!
I am featuring this for "Today's Poem"!
Blessed Be,
~Raven
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Awe, this is packed with emotions and some soul searching to.
I really enjoyed reading this and thank you so much for sharing this wonderful poem.
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