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Silent Revery

Silent revery came at night

on top of the mountain

in the arms of angels, a chill felt alight.

 

Short of memories fountain

in dark rooms in lifeless wings, twenty-nine

shelter the coat of white distraction.

 

That bungalow, weightless, reassigned

of a glow shine today

gathered lies that comfort ruins.

 

Does it make a difference of risque?

Will you sleep tonight in madness?

In the arms of angels comfort, sit of sadness.

 

In lifless wings she held twenty-nine,

and bungalowed in the air tonight,

those of stormed the winter interwined,

a bed of memories in the arc light.

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  • Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You express your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.

  • Very Very good. U have the insight of a mystic. Talent is

  • I definitely like your writing style. It's a very interesting poem very well thought out and just gives that hint of edge there that makes someone just want to keep reading to the end.

  • Very interesting piece you have penned here. Very well written with a bit of mystery and questioning which fits in the theory of angels. The number 29 I can sense is symbolic...as if there were more but 29 was those the angel was sent to embrace. This has a sense of tragedy yet at the same time comforting. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you. May your ink never cease to flow.


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 30

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    In the arms of Angels I loved That, memories fountain. Thanks for sharing and it was a pleasure to read.

  • gregloin
    April 30
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    Def?

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    April 30
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    April 30
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    April 30
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  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    April 30

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    you write with such precision that it is as if you are from another time...I always get the feeling that I am reading some long lost poetry from another era...that takes real talent. thank you for sharing it with us here today...
    peace,
    Kendal

    • kendhal22
      April 30
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my poem. It seems like I get lost watching a movie and out pours the words. I'm passionate of human nature of true events that are captured in movies, go figure. Peace and love. Kendhal22

  • i really like this, you did a good job on the rhyme scheme and the flow is amazing. i'm not entirely sure what it's about, but in this case, that's not exactly a bad thing. it adds to the mystery of it all. nice job! :]

    -JulietteArielle

    • kendhal22
      April 30
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      Thank you

      Thank you for commenting on my poem. Remember the movie "Alive", it was the basis of true story how 250 passenger went through a tragic moment when the plane crashed in Alaska, and only 29 survived a horrible event.

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