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Reality

The sun rises in the west
Shedding light on a seen that I detest,
People fighting
Children dying
Flames igniting
People defying the hate,

And so are plunged
Into a deadly war
That which we all abhor,

With rape as the weapon
And pain the goal,
All vying for complete control
Another day has just past by,

And so the sun now slowly sets,
Over a field strewn with death.

  

Author notes

I am talking about the fighting going on in The Democratic Republic of the Congo. There is lots of fighting going on over natural resources. Rape is a main weapon as the women are the back bones of the society. It is so horrible and horrific.

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  • lesbian-in-love
    October 10
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    This was really enjoyable to read. Iliked it. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Act on Impulse
    August 26
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    Beautiful. Amazing. Horrifying.

    Wonderful
    Belle..


  • spiritraven
    August 9

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    Very well done

    Very good imagery. Perfect flow and a good story. Awaken people to what's going on around them and who know what will happen. They will either try to change it for the better or go hide under the covers and hope someone else will take care of it. The only misspelling I saw was "seen" should be "scene" line two. This is truly a good write and thank you for entering my contest


  • kerrypn
    August 8

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    Very powerful images are created in this poem, and you have highlighted the plight of these victims very well. Slight oopsie on line 2 I think?-seen or scene?, otherwise flawless. Well done


  • Dreamer With Dreams silver member
    August 7

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    Rape is so disgusting. The thought that any man could do such a thing to helpless, innocent people is very disturbing. I'm glad you are shedding light on this issue. Excellent write! Well done!

    Safely hidden in the darkness,

    ~ The Rocker Who Lost All


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    July 20

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    60 for Write
    13 for title
    Great Write.

    nicely penned, wish you luck
    anyway
    thanks for entering

    Out of 100 You have Achieved 73

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Miss Macabre
    June 20

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    Wow. I knew what you were talking about before reading your AN. This was deep, and good.


  • Maggie Kay gold member
    June 19

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    this sort of thing is hard to read. its horrible to think of these things but it was a very very good write. keep it up
    kmp


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    June 8

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    This was a very powerful write; thankyou so much for entering, and I wish you the best of luck

    Maria


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    May 29

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    Horrible as that is there is a great deal of unrest among our own people with the economy the way it is. This is a very good write and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing


  • theVIP
    May 6
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    LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT

    LOVE IT, WONDERFUL AND SAD ;(

  • theVIP
    May 6
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    HORIBLE NOT REALLY

    HORRIBLE THAT THE POEM IS TRUE BUT AWESOME POEM


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    May 5

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    This is so sad children dying I didn't like it and didn't expect it. Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure the read.

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