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Insight To My Dark World




Welcome to my world
Watch your step
pain lies all around

This sickness has been
with me since birth
it will never leave

No matter how hard I try
I can never escape it
Medicine helps, temporarily

Sometimes I cut myself
to shudder the pain
from the inside, out

Worrisome, that one day
I might go to sleep
and never wake up

I am past my life expectancy
and each year is borrowed
my time will end...soon

...and it scares me



Author notes

The average age for Cystic Fibrosis patients is 34...I'll be 38 this year...borrowed time...

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  • toldlikeadream
    July 8

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    Nice

    Writing has a way of crystalizing emotions for me. As others have said, a very personal write, with a lot of emotion. I hope that the effort of putting it on paper is paid back to you in the soothing of the soul.


  • Perfect Asymmetry
    June 7

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    It's so simple and so powerful. You managed to say so much with such simple words, brilliant job.
    Nela

  • arnal
    May 27

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    A very straight forward poem very clear and concise in emotion. Eventually we succumb to ritual of life, and hopefully our good deeds will lead us to safety. Enjoyed


  • SteveS gold member
    May 15

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    Holy wow! What a powerful vignette of realism!...I love the "watch your step" line. That's super. I appreciate the nice words regarding "My Dancer's Smile" as well. Yours in poetry, Steve


  • musicalbabe
    May 14

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    wow, this is amazing! I love how it brings out a dark, sad feeling, and the visual it gives. just wow, amazing


  • Patpowers silver member
    May 9
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    I can understand the way you wrote this. Just a powerful and personal work. THANKS again my friend!


  • Mehra Sultan
    May 9
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    awesome

    i loved it...and its very nicely written...


  • hisfallenangel821
    May 7

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    Dark and personal...I love it.
    I think it was fabulously written.
    The entire thing hit home.
    Yours Truely,
    BAM


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    May 5

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    This is a very dark poem, very personal, and overall wonderfully done. I can't imagine what it's like to be living on borrowed time, to know your going to die... I use to know someone who had a life exspectancy of 18 and I always wondered how he did it, I couldn't. You really captured your emotions in this, especially in this stanza:

    Worrisome, that one day
    I might go to sleep
    and never wake up

    To be afraid you'll never wake up... this is a fantastic poem.

    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.

  • The Rainbows Mind
    April 28

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    Wow, this is a very personal poem.
    By the way, I'd like to appologize for a few of my comments last summer, I feel as though I might have perhaps been a bst harsh and that I didn't necessarily know the situation. Anyway, it's been fairly busy, and I wanted to stop by to read some of your work.
    The only thing that I can say is live every day to the fullest. Great write.
    Take care,
    BC.

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