In a Terracotta clay pot,
Delicious fruit she bears for me,
A cold stone floor, the ideal spot
For my beautiful lemon tree
Delicious fruit she bears for me
A bitter sweet taste but not sour,
For my beautiful lemon tree
Adorning such fragrant flowers
A bitter sweet taste but not sour
Perfect for that gin and tonic,
Adorning such fragrant flowers
Together, almost harmonic
Perfect for that gin and tonic
To relax at the end of day,
Together almost harmonic
Cheers to my lemon tree, I say
To relax at the end of day
A cold stone floor, the ideal spot
Cheers to my lemon tree, I say
In a Terracotta clay pot
Author notes
Prompt: Colour - Yellow
Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
A contest entry
- Form Rounds Contest - Round Three by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended May 3, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your entry
lol An ode to a lemon tree
. That is what this put me in mind of. Gin and tonic huh, lol, I was thinking more a lemon meringue (sp?)
Well done on the form. Nice flow and structure. Good job with the refrain lines. Your rhyme scheme was well developed.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
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Thank you Tammy ...I love lemon meringue pie its after sunday roast
~Judie
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WOW!!
This is very impressive!! My Sis has grown so much and your talent has really expanded. What an incredible write. Very well done. Good lick in the contest.
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Thank you sis
i enjoyed writing this this so much lol i wanted a drink after though
~xxx Judie xxx ~
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This is very lovely. I love lemon and I could just almost smell and taste it. Great rhyme and well done on the form
Best wishes in the contest,
KW~
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Thank you for the wonderful comment ~Judie ~
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Oh how lovely I just thought the images your words gave were very refreshing
Love the form and you have don it beautifully
Best wishes with this hun.
Loves ya bunches to
Gaylene
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Thank you Gaylene(mum) im glad you enyoyed it ~ Judie ~
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Beautiful !
Wow me LLT...great job on this one
I have never tried doing this form. You have done it very, very well. Best of luck Loves ya bunches xxx
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Thankyou me LLT once you get going its kinda not so hard, you should give it a try love ya bunches xxxxxx
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Lovely, tranquil garden, thought here, to the point, it comes from a viewpoint at the kitchen window I'd assume. Lovely visuals in this piece, that I myself would charm what silver or gold I had. Nicely done.
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Thank you Titus so much for the beautiful commet ~ Judie~
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aw a beautiful write I love your imagery and flow throughout its wonderful good luck in the contestmaralisa
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Thankyou maralisa ... ~ Judie ~
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