Thinking back on everything you ever said,
And all of those sweet lies spoken.
You only fucked with my head,
you only left me broken.
I opened my heart and let you in, I trusted you, we got so close,
But then You turned away, when I needed you most.
This song you know it's for you,
And all the fucked up shit you put me through.
All that time you were only pretending,
All that time I thought you were worth defending.
You said you were in love, and then you just gave up.
Our time together seemed just like a movie,
You were my not so happy ending.
Back then I would deny it, but now I see,
You and I were never meant to be.
You words they were so breathtaking,
I was so young, how could I have known.
All that time you were only faking,
In your eyes the haunting truth was never shown.
On the phone after it all went wrong ,You told me
"that you missed me and promised you'd come back for me"
And I remember I said no,
Yeah thanks to you I learned to never again trust so easily.
I finally had the strength to end,
After all, all you did was pretend.
And I would never go back again.
This song you know it's for you,
And all the fucked up shit you put me through.
All that time you were only pretending,
All that time I thought you were worth defending.
You said you were in love, and then you just gave up.
Our time together seemed just like a movie,
You were my not so happy ending.
Back then I would deny it, but now I see,
You and I were never meant to be.
You were my first scar,
You were the first to break my heart.
Do you remember the heart you destructed?
The pain it slowly faded away,
The tears for you they have obstructed.
I think all you did was make me stronger today.
Now that I am Finally over it,
I will forgive, But I will never forget.
Author notes
Prompt: Its Finally Over
http://allpoetry.com/topic/2487
Prompt for Anything and everything: (ending love)
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This is exactly what I'm looking for. This is perfect. I love it. All your emotions feel so real. I love it. Thank you for entering.
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Thanks for entering!
Well first off let me say I'm glad this is song lyrics... otherwise the voices singing it in my head might have been considered abnormal!
First thing I notice is that the beginning of each line is capitalised. In poetry, this isn't necessary; however, as a lyricist you can get away with it.
The first stanza is lovely; "you" is capitalised where it shouldn't be.
Second/fourth stanza (the chorus): Gorgeous, but I feel as though "This song you know it's for you // And all the fucked up shit you put me through" should be two lines (where I've put the //), to fit with the overall rhyme scheme. Also, "just" and "but" are capitalised where they shouldn't be.
Third stanza: "The" should be "they" (first line of the stanza), and "how" and "you" are capitalised where they shouldn't be.
Fifth stanza: "Finally" and "but" are capitalised where they shouldn't be.
Overall, this is a stunning song and I can REALLY relate! Your lyric writing is absolutely beautiful; you just need to work on your presentation.
Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck!!
Maria
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Thanks so much!
I fixed everything
-♥Amanda♥
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wow. love this song, was exactly what i was looking for thank you for your entry
my favourite line
This song you know it's for you, and all the fucked up shit you put me through.
very well worded, a good flow, nice rhyme, thank you
alex -
Aw.
It sounds like that you've had a very rough life! 
I am sorry that you've had to go through so much pain.
I need to also ask if u can place this in adult?
Thanks once again for your deep entry.
Kari -
Oh ya!!! Been here!! Your poem was filled with the angst of being mistreated!! Excellent job on the lyrics and thank you for your entry!
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Sweet
I love it me and my friends have been through kind of the sam situattion -
Such a heartfelt poem filled with pain. Very well done. So full of emotion.
Thanks so much for another entry
Gaylene
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excellent! u express lots of sad and depressing feelings, but at the end, u show tht u got stronger, nice!!!
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Painfully raw emotion captured in your words, Beautifully composed. Thank you for another wonderful entry!
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