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Sinking

Drip

Plummeting from the clouds, it begins
The gravity of the situation pulls
Hurtling down, down

Splash
Bob for a moment on the brine
Glimpse a tear-laden sky
Where? What? How?

Gurgle

Air? Can’t breathe
Mouth chokes
Salt filled

Sink

Light going, green to black
Limbs heavy, mind heavy
Can’t move

Drown

No help
No hope
Pressure crushing

Implode



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From picture prompt 'Depression' by optiknerve-gr

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    May 9

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    Yes this explains exactly how it feels sometimes, all out of control. Well done here. Best to you in the contest


  • Candyknife gold member
    May 1

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    well

    this is quite powerful and dramtic, love the ending, a great take on the prompt, good luck in the contest

  • A floatingleaf silver member
    April 28
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    Well written, depression is a terrible feeling...