In silence, we sat
Such intence quiet..
All of Heavens Angels hushed....
If I had mused long enough
away from my selfish feelings
Had taken time or inclination
to the destruction in my wake....
Surely that heart who has been so wounded,
so deeply pierced by loves betrayal.
She would forgive me?...
Willingly I take this blade to my heart.
Do I deserve any less?
Her words caress my heart...
"I forgive you......"
Author notes
Sometimes we do things that we dont intentionally mean to do.. And sometimes there is a point at which we feel there would be no return.. except for three words.. I forgive you...So I dedicate this poem to the lady who is my soulmate who has forgiven me...
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Comments
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I absolutely adored this poem, it is rather short but full of emotions...I'm very happy that your soulmate has forgiven you...
good luck and take care
Suza -
14.4/25
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nicely done. what did she forgive u for? i found no confession in this...
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Good write as per prompt
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forgiveness is the strongest display of love in my opinion.
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Beautiful
wow this this is amazing it makes me feel happy to have read another one of the best visualists poet on here the words flowed like you had just felt that your entire life and om my god i love the word carees and the way you rhymed it amazing this is a beutifully written poem fair maiden beautiful my favorite line has to be the caress part
Surely that heart who has been so wounded,
so deeply pierced by loves betrayal.
She would forgive me?...
Willingly I take this blade to my heart.
Do I deserve any less?
Her words caress my heart...
"I forgive you......"
no doubt my favorite par fair maiden literally thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with me i really mean it i haven't read anything like this in a while now so please keep your goddess like poems on coming and feed my need for this mental speed of your and fancy my mind with your lyrical flow cause i could sing it i love it fair maiden amazing can't wait for your new release thank you
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I loved the imagery in this poem and its emotional impact is solid.
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Awesome Write!
Your wording is perfect! I love this one, it is so deep. Good Luck!!!!
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A beautiful write, quite haunting in fact. Yes, those words can be important to hear and important and difficult to say.
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Beautifully written! The gift of Forgiveness is healing even to the one who gives it!
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Forgiveness closes up a lot of wounds, and takes away strife, well written and expressed. Blessings.
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Im happy for you.
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