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Beauty

Beauty is- and shall alway's be
let it stand-some day into eternity

It's existence can be destroyed
it's designe used to deploy
Meaningless reverence- of it's own elegance

Ounce untouched by all - Never upset at all
It can only last forever - Until the day of never
Existing in it's- own truth - Expressing it's- whole truth

Which you find so hard to understand
Some day you'll have to lend it a hand
For it is you who are the sole of the land

And my sorrow to you
Who are
 
Damned
                                         

                                                                                       Roland Halloway

A contest entry

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  • Cyanide Dreams
    July 8

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    This was pretty good. I liked the rhyme in this one and the meter. How well it flows off the tongue is great. Great job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • CentrifugalCorpse
    July 7

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    Interesting form & the pauses are well placed. Unfortunately, this isn't what I was looking for for this contest. It's a great piece though, & I wish you the best of luck in the other contests you've entered.

    New plague

  • Abnormal
    June 27
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    Good write. The rhyme and flow were very nice. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • crivanea silver member
    June 24
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    beauty is fragile and that's what makes it fleetingly beautiful.. nice poem n thnx for entering.

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 18

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    i really liked this piece. i thought it was pretty and the flow as awesome! the rhyme rocked as well. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • PurpleSky
    June 1

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    your rhyme rythem and flow were excelent in this piece. You did a very good job at getting your point across. Nicely done and Thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest
    huggles
    Lena


  • teddybare
    June 1
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    an ode' to pervasive grace

    not too shabby


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    May 7

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    i would like to thank you for entering and i wish you well in this contest. viyanna rosemarie

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 6

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    Thank you for your profound entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • catz Moderators member
    May 3

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    An interesting poem and well written Beauty can be so very misleading but in it's purity it is indeed 'beautiful'.

    Thank you for entering the contest

    Dee


  • Sunday Rain
    May 1
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    ...

    ^_^ you are talented, you just have to believe that you are,


  • PurpleSky
    April 30
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    doesnt fit the contest sorry


  • blood.stained.tears
    April 28

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    okay so i dont quite get how this relates to the topic if you can tell me how it does, than i will try again, but i just dont see how this relates sorry.

  • Mercury Rising
    April 28

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    Well, this is not exactly was I was asking for in terms of rhyme scheme, but it's still a fine poem, and it was a pleasure to read. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.

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