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seven days

Sitting there
Not smiling
Spirling down
I’ll do it again tonight
With less in my head
& Ill remember that last time
when i was unbarely cold
& unbarely sad
she was really loud
& i didnt mind
i called my dad
things that are not
the same thing
always float apart
stayed up all night
fuzzy words
comforted me
got my nights messed up
my days never
stay together
they float
under bridges
like sticks
im not healthy
im not ill
im too tired
i take pills
i think too much about myself
im in no pain
i think much about
how awful i am
it hurts to let you down
hurting was never that bad after all
i dont know why i care so much
that you do
i see everything
the lie in every word
but i cant stop myself
its so customary

late, good night

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  • Lies4Truth
    June 14
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    really good poem i like how fragmented it is and almost chaotic. Loved it good job


  • Clarabelll
    April 30

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    It kind of sounds like you are about to kill yourself.. thats just what I think
    but good poem I like it.


  • Iris Doyle
    April 28
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    oh. & good poem.

  • Iris Doyle
    April 28

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    they float
    under bridges
    like sticks

    AHH POOH STICKS
    i was happy i could relate to this.
    && random story.
    but you talked about sadness & pills.
    so i thought i'd share it.
    i asked ryan if antidepressant pills were illegal.
    & he flipped out & thought i was considering them.
    when really.
    i just wanted to kno ahah.
    well. tthats that.
    bother. i think ive just given erin another story
    to bash me on.
    whatever :T
    shes probably reading this thinking,
    oh boy. what a dork.
    & i'll say. oh no. not a dork.
    just quietly insane.

    • why would he flip out about antidepressants?
      those are very helpful,
      for certain people,
      i think you just want to be crazy
      because not being crazy doesnt explain
      whats happening inside
      & saying that your crazy would be that make sense
      when really it doesnt make sense
      & its crazy
      but your not actually crazy
      thats how i was at least.
      but now i know ive always
      had more sense than most people.

      • no idea.
        & that secretly made sense.
        but im pretending i have no idea what you just said.
        because if people knew i knew what you just said.
        they really would call me crazy...


      • eronrox
        April 29
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        anti depressants increase the risk of suicide
        so whats the poiiint?


  • eronrox
    April 28
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    acceptable

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