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Almost nothing.

 

 

sweltering, the world melts inside out

I lived in this ever burning inferno,

sweat beading upon brow &

running down my back & thighs

so thick,forming a mucus film; a second skin.

unbearable heat rises, soaks into my every cell,

steaming my mind in an unthinkable fire,

turning flesh to liquid, evaporating as soon as formed.

muscles tense away from fever's touch, no escape,

becoming nothing but my charred skeleton.

 

comforting.

odd as it may be, I feel relief in being remains,

almost nothing.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt:
"Heat, ma'am! it was so dreadful here, that I found there was nothing left for it but to take off my flesh and sit in my bones."
-Sydney Smith, Lady Holland's Memoir

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  • consternation imply
    July 30

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    This has a teeth gritting hands clenched feel to it. I love the beautiful formation of words and the intensity in this one. I would never try to critique anything, but especially not this one. I am even more impressed to see that it was a quickie contest you got honorable on. Awesome write.


  • Nienna Calmcacil
    June 6

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    You're a master of imagery. You capture visions, colors, hues, and tones so perfectly in your words...it's a skill that I greatly envy.

    I'd say that your work is perfect. And it takes a lot to impress me enough to say that.


  • Atrophya
    May 6
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    oh i hate it when im that hot!!!
    sucks ass!!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 28

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    Great job!
    We really felt the emotion and imagery
    flowing through this piece.
    It really brought the poem to life!
    Loved it,

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


    • EverxEnding silver member
      April 29
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      thank you for the HM! It means a lot to me!
      I'm glad you enjoyed my entry!
      The prompt was amazing!


  • Candy Morphine
    April 28

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    ahh; i love it. the language you use paints such an intricate picture.

    and i actually really like the short length, for you are so talented at delievering a large impace with few words; it very much works in your favour.


  • Kari gold member
    April 28

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    Wow you did a great job with this prompt. I wish you the very best in this contest here.

    Kari

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