So he said he loved me,
but I knew that was a lie.
He said he always liked me,
but stared at me when I cried.
He traced the lines
growing deep,
he was the only one
in my head
all the time.
I could not sleep.
The words on the back grew,
and one day he read them.
I read his eyes instead.
You could tell it was a fairytale,
You could tell he loved me so.
You could tell he didn't want to leave me,
I could tell he didn't know.
He suddenly understood my problems,
My messed up lies inside.
And surprisingly,
One, single tear,
began to well up in his eye.
A tear filled heavy with the love he had for me.
He had to let me go,
I knew what he had seen.
And so he said he loved me,
but I knew that was a lie.
It wasn't that he loved me,
it was just that he still did.
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Comments
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"And so he said he loved me,
but I knew that was a lie.
It wasn't that he loved me,
it was just that he still did."
Wonderful lines.
thanks so much for taking the time to enter
good luck -
Sometimes it's hard to know for sure what someone else thinks and feels within a relationship. You've related very well the confusion felt in this poem.
A good write and thank you for entering the contest
Dee
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a good start
I get the sense of what you're trying to say I think. The uncertainty of revealing yourself to another...The end of the poem leaves me somewhat confused but perhaps it's meant to show the confusion that you are feeling.It seems like it wants to be ironic but it ends up being confusing. But a good piece so far,very emotive.
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good job
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