High up in the lofty sky,
Above the clouds of rain,
There lives a love as free as I,
A beauty most arcane
She loves to laugh and sing and cry,
Both tears of joy and pain
I recommend you visit nigh
The home of Mary Jane
Up top I met her, years ago,
Upon the mountain peak
My travels took me many days,
For I was young and weak
I stumbled ‘cross her home surprised
And utterly amazed
My heart was fully glorified
My thoughts were full of praise
For years and years we laughed and sang
And danced under the moon
We cherished life with open eyes
To age we were immune
We’d lie beneath the midnight sky
And gaze up into time
For years I gazed, my gaze sublime,
A boon brought to my eye
Years passed by beneath that sky
Above the clouds of rain
The clouds blocked out the view below
Reality’s domain
I pondered ‘bout this mountain top
And what I could obtain
From living here forever and
Remaining free of pain
The time had come for me to leave
And face internal strife
I had to find a goal I could
Accomplish with my life
I work real hard, though now and then
When life gets too mundane,
I climb the peaks to see the stars
And dance with Mary Jane
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Quite an interesting piece; you're a most gifted poet. Unless, of course, your inspiration for this was..."Mary Jane."
Hopefully not; one of your ability wouldn't seem to need any help. Great rhyme and flow. Good write.
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Magnificent~
You have a beautiful word flow...and i absolutely love the over all piece and concept. =} I think the ending lines are perfect...Very nice writing.
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This was beautiful!
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Haha, I love it!! Fantastic, fantastic write! I love the way you write about Mary Jane, and your flow and rhyme are excellent. Great piece!
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Something about this; quite phenomenal.
The feeling of a journey well traveled and an experience still alive within the memory (Yes, I acknowledge this is metaphorical though. hehe) An acquaintance, friend, and/or lover we all appreciate.
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Good job.
I love it.
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Ah, the 70's...brings back memories but I didn't live near any mountains, Just in Texas...LOL....this is a GREAT read and I loved every word
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I too have picked leaves from that same mountain top. Only to return once again and fill the pit from hunger. Enjoyed the journey and viewed the scenery as a distant memory. Thank You!
In God's Love
Three Doves
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Oh NIIIIICEEE.
It really has a nice rhythm and flow to it, and I have a feeling of what Mary Jane IS.
But it's really cool, about how the high can make you happy, and make you dance and sing. But then you realize, that you have to realize reality and go back. But never fully back, because when your feeling down, you just go back up to Mary Jane.
It sounds nice, and I like it.
Keep writing, you adapted something I never thought anyone could, and make it sound good.
Hey that rhymed, it must be rubbing off how awesome this was.
Love it, and I hope all ends well, my friend.
-Cyril Huntinghawk
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