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Empty poem

 

 

 

 

I

 

It was silent

on that thin line,

where mouth and lips

      merge into eachother.

 

   That line,

where words birth

and find freedom

   in waste of lungs.

 

 

II

 

I stood in front of the mirror,

        measuring the distance

               between my lips;

 

   quite impressive,

   the space I found

   to harbor language.

 

 

III

 

The taste of paper and ink

isn't quite what I expected -

   maybe I couldn't stomach it raw

   or perhaps it needed spice.

 

 

IV

 

Expectantly,

   I opened my mouth

      but only found a syllable

         stuck between my teeth

            and a letter

    falling with a soft thud

    in the sink.

 

 

V

 

    Apparently,

    my voice died

                  a million words ago.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Peteskid gold member
    May 24

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    So nicely done here, each stanza brings another way of saying, there is a loss of something, and the path back is difficult; but will be done...strong imagery here...PK

  • patron saint
    May 5

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    Leander, I have told you this in nearly every comment in the past five years, but you are truly a beautiful human being. Your poetry reflects it, and I would love to hear an update from you.

    J


  • Hollow WhisperDoll
    May 3

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    A very beautiful poem that really touched me. Somewhere floating between the words you can just feel the emotions that were put down in this poem.

    I must say I envy the way you write x] Please keep writing

    <333 CherrieJ


  • LadyUnique silver member
    April 28

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    i am soooo jealous! i should have written this

    i felt futility in this. as if i had heard myself talk too much or repeated myself too much and no one listened to me. or maybe that i had a lot to say but no one to say it to. either way i felt futility. not fertility, futility

    i'm impressed

  • mcheadle
    April 27
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    A lot to think of in this ...mac

  • mcheadle
    April 27
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    A lot to think of in this ...mac


  • Cyril Huntinghawk
    April 27

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    Wow, you make it seem like everything a million words ago was inspired by everything around you..And after that everything seemed empty, and that it felt dead to you. Or thats how I saw it anyway.

    I liked the way you put it, it gave it more interest and flow.

    I thought it was great and hope the best for you my friend. ^__^

    -Cyril Huntinghawk


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    April 27

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    Lea bum I love this, but I already told you that when you showed me earlier before posting I think its awesome, especially now that i see it laid out....wonderful

    dikke knuffel
    Tasha


  • Metaphorist
    April 27

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    You are amazing. The tone here just breaks my heart. I hope you find love again soon so these melancholy pieces can end


  • Daniela Violin silver member
    April 27

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    Hi Leander, do you remember me?
    from, oh, 4 years ago?

    This poem is AMAZING!!!! I love this so much... the ending is stellar! I am at a loss for words... I think my voice died too


  • Antipodi
    April 27

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    The dark foreboding write you have created here dear poet it sings classic verse and is a very enjoyable read


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    April 27
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    I enjoyed this very much. thank you for sharing. keep up the great work...


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 27

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    It appears your voice found its way from beyond he grave.

    An introspective and thought provoking piece,

    Nicely done indeed

    Jeff


  • Howard Manser gold member
    April 27

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    Interesting Observation!

    What can I say, "my voice died a million words ago."
    You did a nice job with such a simple subject! Howard


  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    April 27

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    I think this is an incredibly beautiful piece by you. Wonderfully worded, and the cascade of emotion spectacular. Love this!

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