Were drifting away, aimlessly we wonder out into a sea of loneliness.
Going no where together we shared it all too fast and no there’s nothing left.
But I guess it was meant to be, I should have seen it back then.
When I saw your true face, the demise of your loyalty.
I trusted you too much, let you into my heart too fast.
I suppose it happened for a reason, everything does in this world.
In our life there is no longer event without reason.
Maybe it would've been better had I never forgiven you.
Maybe my dreams would have come true.
Now I'll never know and its all because of you.
Without you I could have gone ahead and become all I ever wanted.
I have no regrets of your departure, free from you and your sickness.
I needed this pain to wake up into the world of the dead.
Now I can truly feel the hurt of so many and become more than I ever hoped.
Alas my dear friend I no longer need you I have found myself.
My heart and soul are now free, broken from you chains and lies.
This is the way I want it now, I'm free to live my own life.
Author notes
So this is a prewrite, I thought I should mention. I just wanted to edit out some spellig mistakes, and also add a note saying which option I decided upon.
"*Trust. Giving it, losing it it, earning it, showing it, having issues with it. whatever, just tell me all about it."
I've had a lot of issues with this kind of thing over my life, though I think so have we all. A shame indeed. Though to be honest, it kind of goes with a few of the other options. I think, I could easilly enter a poem for all of them, I can really relate to this contest, glad you made it.
A contest entry
- Living Through. by infinite spirit.
750 points, ended May 10, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does it get the point across?
Comments
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Absolutely lovely words!
I take this as a writing of true stability and self reflection. You are the champion here indeed. I also see this write of yours containing some fillers that you don't need. If you broke it down making each line shorter, even hitting enter after the commas, will give it such power and grace. You have a way with words in my mind. You and I are on the same page with "Trust," such a lonely word that get abandoned by fools and tossed to us makers of life - to make something of it, for it should last forever and we are destined to make it work as it should- our minds are there, but other's are not. To shame.
Keep writing friend!
Note: Second to last line needs to by "your" instead of "you."
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the moment of that realization is so wonderful. thank you for sharing it with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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