Under the starlit night
Waves of candle lit moonlight
Casacade on the faces
Gone were all the traces
Happiness and homeward stead
Leaving long a road dark and dead
In the withering dust the lions lie
And sweeping canverns cradle cries
Of forgotten souls of shattered past
And renewed are those of renown last
Shown in the throws of glory
Telling the knights story
Between time and time again
Showing a darkened end
The moon meets the scented candle
And throws the Earth's biggest scandal
Author notes
5: between candle light and moon light
In a list
A contest entry
- Phrase Contest by piccola.
1200 points, ended April 30, 13 entries
Honorable mention
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1000 points, ended June 2, 155 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Beautifully done. Nice rhythm and ryme! Thanks for entering my contest and showing your work here. It's an honor to read it
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congradulations on the gold
this is truly lovely, like the rhyme scheme and the flow, the last stanza is really haunting
Between time and time again
Showing a darkened end
The moon meets the scented candle
And throws the Earth's biggest scandal
again a grand write congradu;ation on the shiny!!
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Very well written I really enjoyed this write. The piece spoke well and it had good rhythm. I really like it. It pulls the imagination and holds it deeply within. Thank you for sharing this.
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Of forgotten souls of shattered past
And renewed are thosed of renown last
Shown in the throws of glory
Telling the knights story
Between time and time again
Showing a darkened end
The moon meets the scented candle
And throws the Earth's biggest scandal"
These two stanzas were well don but I saw a mistake in the second line of the first stanza I quoted thosed should be those. "And renewed are thosed of renown last"
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thankies. i fixed the typos! loli make typos alot when i type too fast
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Good-job...Awesome.really good.
I think that this was well written.... -
I don't normally like rhyme but i do like this!
such beautiful and vivid imagery throughout, you've painted some lovely pictures with your words. i also really love the title of this piece, it really caught my attention.
excellent work!
ElectricBloom
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An excellent poetic rendering of the phrase, and a fine piece. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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This is beautiful, your vocabulary is so captivating. Woderful job, truly an artist
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I like the rhyme and how the poem flows. Thanks
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Ashley!
This is amazing! I was captivated by your poetic voice and imagery! Such a beautiful write. You did good girl...............really really good!
I loved this so much, I don't know what else to say, except it is so beautiful and then dark at the same time!
Wow, captured my mind and heart.
Great one.
Love,
Annette
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CONGRADULATIONS ON THE GREENIE
I like this write very much, we live some where between a candle and the moon
Between time and time again
Showing a darkened end
The moon meets the scented candle
And throws the Earth's biggest scandal
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This sounds like natures ruthless streak, a menace between the time and now of calm. Lovely piece.
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thanks you for commenting and the clappies, for you being such a good poet it surprises me that you gave clappies.
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