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Those stars are shining too bright.

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i.

I begun by spinning webs in your hair and laid eggs that'd hatch into your scalp; I thought agony would paint a perfect picture of us on the surface and I know I wasn't wrong, by the tears tracing your eyelashes.

That's when the waves in the shore winked at me; I knew I had heaven at my lips.

ii.

We were stars in the past -

colliding like comets, as our sighs were red dwarves;

imploding infront of the world and leaving black holes where they used to be.

I worshipped cosmotology when it was you I was examining through a telescope, it made the search immobilizing.


iii.

I don't think you can stand up on the moon,

scientists have proved it

but we still took our chances on falling [it's no different to a faultline.]

I wont be shining on someone elses hemisphere, as long as you warn me this time,

but I never knew the space was taken -

I never should've parked.

iv.

So we were all smiles and secrets, but I thought honesty reigned our kingdom,

but your heart was coloured moon & everyone knows that lunar pathways always fade,

but I still wonder why my tears are rainbows in the dark.

v.

Note to the burning one,

'I want my shooting star back.

Enclosed is a stamped address

return to breaking sender.

Love, tragic ending.'

Author notes

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This is M i d n i g h t - x - r o s e, just incase you can't read it.


This is about someone being madly in love, but realising the other person has found that they aren't in love with them afterall and how it breaks this person completely.
Hope it makes sense.

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  • OMG. It's like you crawled inside my mind and put all of my jumbled thoughts into a beautiful poetic masterpiece. Gahhhh, this was freaking gorgeous and I loved it!!!

     

    The second stanza was my absolute favorite; you placed images in here that stain the mind and I love you to death for it

     

    A tragic yet stunning write...definitely a finalist ♥

  • I did like the ending inparticular, the picture was epic too!

    Thank you for entering!
    Take care,
    Sophie.


  • aanika
    May 19

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    i love the ending! this is possibly my favourite piece that i've read by you. every line was so beautiful, so emotional. thank you for entering


  • Violinstrings silver member
    April 27

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    this is such a powerful piece , how someone what to remember something more than what is on their hand , ink or whatever is on thier mind
    very thought provoking you brought more meaning to this picture


  • pinksnowboots
    April 27

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    Ohh gorgeous! I LOVE the form you use-what is it? I am scared to be competing with you!


  • Tqop
    April 27

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    A thousand applauds:

    I love the astronomy reference. Nice. sad poem though. It was delightful to read, and it really made me smile. Great job! I loved it. Smile. You've got talent.

    Love,
    Evemauy

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