~Temptation~
Temptation is the poison,
You pass on from your gentle kiss.
Desire are the words,
You whisper from your very lips.
Promises are the sounds you make,
When you drift off to sleep.
Joy is the word to describe,
When our bodies meet.
Eyes are the warriors,
That fight this unfair fight
Hands are the healers,
That fight for you through the night.
Pulses are the lullaby,
That rocks me off to sleep.
Leaving me breathless,
Making sneaking out discreet.
A bathtub full of bubbles,
Is the way we use to trust.
A shower and some body wash,
Changed that all to lust.
Secrets are the way you smell,
Like another girl’s perfume.
Lies are the way you know that I know,
And still say "I love you.".
Tears are the unanswered prayers,
And never heard wishes on shooting stars.
Fear is that pain in my chest,
Up for nights wondering where you are.
Anger is the knowledge,
But no power to walk away.
Forgiveness is the belief,
In every lie that it all will be okay.
Tenderness is the way,
My heart skips a beat.
Obsessive is the way,
I still bow down at your feet.
Old is the reason,
You’re trying something new.
Habit is the reason,
I’ll be the one you run back to.
Ignorance is the truth,
Which is why I’ll never learn.
Denial is why I leave my hand in the fire,
Forever to burn.
Hello is the suicide plan,
Signed and waiting.
Goodbye is the death,
Consumed in them and suffocating.
Selfish is the reason,
I don’t want you to go.
Love is the blindness,
As this story shows.
Author notes
C:- Romantic poem, but a sad romance.
A contest entry
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Wonderful poem...so many great phrases..."secrets are the way you smell" is so descriptive. Congrats on the gold.
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Thank you so much!!!
I appreciate it.
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very sad and made me sigh
I loved this poem. I suppose the temptation lies in the one cheating or maybe its the one tempted to leave but can't. It was a good insight to how victims of cheats feel and how it is such a terrible thing to do to someone. I see its relevance here. Its a push to find my fave line cause I honestly think they are all brilliant but I like the part about leaving your hand in the fire to forever burn that sort of summed it all up.thank-you for entering good luck
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Thank you!
I try. The poem itself is a temptation so I thought having the 3 metaphors laced together made for a great write
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"Tears are the unanswered prayers, And never heard wishes on shooting stars"
How perfectly explained.
I'll probably think of those lines everytime I lie restless in the company of uninvited and unwanted thoughts, memories and daydreams.
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Well, that is what tears are, or atleast that is how I see them.
Feel free to think of them!
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YES this is wonderful now. so much easier on the eyes and it looks like a poem great
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Thank you.
Thank you for the suggestion, I would have left it that way.
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now this is like much better I still feel that based on your style of writing that stanzas and line break up will help you very very much not just inunderstanding flow but also with your reader and their appreciation for th piece! another well done
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I try.
I'm trying. I am here to learn, so comment freely! Thanks so much for reading and I'll work on the stanzas
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wich option is this?
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Sorry.
romance, option C...but a sad romance
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Beautiful!
The best written words are those that don't make a detour through your brain and go directly to the heart. I like the lines about Anger and Forgiveness
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AWW!
Thank you! It's a very special poem for me
I'm glad someone likes it...What about did you find so beautiful might I ask? -
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW *crys* this is so strikingly beautiful !!!!
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