I still think your mother
isn't really dead and sometimes
I see women that look just like her
in normal places, completely public places but
they're always gone as soon as I see them.
I swear they're like race horses to get away from me.
still, how careless to be out
in the light.
but I imagine you don't think of your mother
very often, so I hope
you've remained lonely and remained
happy. I know they are one in the same
and you maintain them with specific intention.
I hope you have kept the exact distance
and degree of detachment
as comforts your wingspan.
I just hope all is well. my heart glows
with the thought of your happiness
existing while no one is a part of it.
I imagine you are doing beautiful things
while remaining quite simple
and I hope
these letters never interrupt you
and I hope
you'll never read them
if they do.
Author notes
i'm sorry that anybody has to die these days
Comments
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o.0 i was going to offer 'one in the same' should be 'one and the same'... so uh seeing the atlantic's comment now i'm not sure which one it is.
i didn't think the second stanza was too wordy except maybe in the last sentence. but the stanza as a works as a development of character.
i liked this a lot. i'm glad to see something new from you. you are such a mystery
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one and the same>>>one in the same??
i love the first stanza. immensely. and the ending killed. the second stanza though was a bit shaky for me, i understood the message i think but idk, i think its a bit wordy and worded awkwardly. i'm sorry if i'm being too harsh i just prefer constructive myself let me know i'm always down for poetic analysis
great writing
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