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another man (Found Wanting)

You think you can take her away from me
somehow make her love you more
you would steal her heart away
be the one that she adores

If ever she desired it
I would gladly set her free
that is just the charm of it
in my arms there is no need


a blossom budding flower
with freedom to kiss the breeze
to soak up rain and sunshine
to brighten the shrubs and trees


for this reason you came to cherish her
but a sniff is all that you will get
for this flower is growing in my care
and your clippers I won't let


I tenderly take good care of her
she's ever in my watchful eyes
your just one of the very many
attracted butterflies


so shew away from her
go find another flower
this one fills my heart with joy
and you only wish to devour

Author notes

thank you Tory for always helping me with much needed editing. Love you

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  • how elegant and filled with such beauty and stunning write.

  • awww so beautiful! well done loved it!


  • cloe009
    April 29

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    uh-uh

    ummm what can i say other then i hope she's so worth it hey look at one of mine do i have any contest worthy


  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 28

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    I love the metaphor and images you portray here! This tender flower is not going to be clipped by any triflers...You are so protecting and loving..Delightful reading!


  • aboomer silver member
    April 27

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    Love the wording and depth in this. Great images of emotion - nicely done.
    I enjoyed this.
    best wishes

  • This is a great poem, I enjoyed reading it. The word choice is brilliant.
    Nela


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    April 27

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    I the third line of the first stanza, "Steel" needs to be "Steal"...just a minor glitch...I like the way this flowed, so perfect...a nice rythm to it...


  • theVIP
    April 27
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    love it
    you are talented
    keep up the good work


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 27

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    Very beautiful with a great rhyme scheme
    in it. You did a wonderful job putting this together. Thanks a lot for sharing it with all of us here and keep up the wonderful work!




    Jeremy0826


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    April 27

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    great write and filled

    with confidence and love, you penned a very lovely poem, the rhyme was so smooth!

    you are featured and I hope you dont mind in
    "Todays Poems"

    Blessings

    Rend



  • always lovely...
    love you

    passions

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