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Contrition.

My heart bled

and dyed the roses red,

tear drops fell to quench

the drought of grief.

The plinths by your grave sides

have worn to a pew

wherein my chapel of sorrow

I still light the candle for you...

 

 

Unanswered prayers

wears the path to the cemetry

and while I sit and call your names

to every breeze

It resusciates that hurricane

which took everything

and left me.

 

 

I mourn

with a heartbeat of thunder

and cry a monsoon of tears

because my mind

will not allow me

to forget you.

 

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For my parents and four brothers. R.I.P.

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  • Kevin Moderators member
    May 15

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    bleed -> bled. i'd add a period after ed, and drop 'as' from the next line? tear drops fall / and quench grief's draught.

    beautiful write, thanks!


  • SEA angel gold member
    May 5

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    WOW

    I can SO feel this and yours is WAY better than mine. Your poem touched my heart and played the pain of my loss like a harp held by my guardian angels for whom I still mourn who have part.


  • Cannonsfire
    April 29

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    I am not saying anything here because I know and it touches me again, the way it did that day you allowed me to share with you. Know that they remain in my heart always with you. C


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    April 28

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    Healing comes with time, but not in and of THIS world. Perhaps in another... When those we love are the lost, and sorrow falls around us forever and ever, no amount of time can ever take away their memory. Nor will we ever forget them, not in our lives... Thank you for sharing your heart-and-soul-felt 'poem of memorial' to your parents and lost siblings. I feel your grief, and all I can say is, that I can only hope for better tomorrows, for the future of our ALL children, everywhere the world over. And I pray for some kind of peace and solace to accompany you, as you light up the candles of your life. Take care, and God Bless. Loves ya, xx Cyn xx


  • thepoetssoul
    April 27

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    A beautiful piece of poetry, very touching
    Thanks for sharing your heart and spirit.
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 26

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    I love my heart bleeds and dyed the roses red. Good luck in the contest I really liked your write. It was a pleasure to read.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    April 26

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    This is wonderfully written! You definitely made me feel your pain. I love your choice of words in this..."unanswered prayers wears the path to the cemetery"..."I mourn
    with a heartbeat of thunder
    and cry a monsoon of tears"...very beautiful!
    Pam


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    April 26

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    I am truly sorry for your loss...what pain and agony you must be feeling. You are very brave to allow yourself to open up to it here with your writing. I think you have a true grip on the reality of it all. I wish you nothing but the best in all the days ahead. thank you for sharing this...you will have helped many in being grateful for where they are and what they have...peace to you always in all ways...
    -Kendal

  • MxA
    April 26

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    I agree, a very deep piece you have here. So sad.. and filled with pain. Many can relate to this, I know I can. I hope you can get on the road to healing. Thanks for sharing.

    MxA


  • Jay81
    April 26
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    Wow, that was deep, well done, Im sorry for your loss.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    April 25

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • Andi. gold member
    April 25

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    oh wow.
    quite a piece here.
    how does one dig that deeply inside themselves to come up with something this profound?
    simply amazing write.
    thank you for sharing
    ♥ Uni


  • Pure Thought silver member
    April 25
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    My heart sits quietly on your shoulder and breathes a sigh of caring.

    love, buddy

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