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End of the Day at Gordon's Bay

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I see the sun
slip
into the sea

I feel the sand
move
under my feet

I taste salt breeze
curve
over my cheek

I stroke bare nape
brow
fingertips reach

I palm calm words
sigh
soft relieve

I smell deep dusk
draped
over eyes' weave

A wondrous eve


Author notes

Sometimes ...

Photo: ML April 9, 2009 Gordon's Bay

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  • crivanea silver member
    May 14

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    wow....first..congrat on the gold..second...what a wonderful poem for the prompt..3rd..this poem is just lovely..simple..beautiful..a perfect sunset..


  • crimsondew
    May 4
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    A wonderfulpoem with lovely images here..congrats on the gold!


  • Hello...No.One.Home silver member
    May 4

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    Awww... It waws as if I was walking along the beach with someone I loved


    A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.

    Kate


    • myrataal silver member
      May 4
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      Thank you so much ...

      for a lovely comment. And once again, for the Gold.

      Love
      Myra

  • Bad Bill
    April 26

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    This is wonderfully romantic and softly sensual, especially the way you employ the senses of seeing, smelling, touching, etc. Beautifully done.

    Bill


  • Sonja
    April 26

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    Beautiful picture of sunset, beautiful painted poetry. I like the sea myself. Picture looks like somebody spilled the gold into the watter.
    ~Sonja~


  • individuality gold member
    April 26

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    ah the glorious sun, the days are here for me again where mornings are bright and shining, the evenings too just as dusk arrives, a bright light comes right through the window. into my sea. soft sand between toes - capturing those grains, golden specks of god. winds as calm as love, gently softening the face, the cheek waves an hello to the sky. passion brush moments as the skin is tenderly smiled at. palming words - good imagery there, soft. scents wrap time into spun seconds, stretched into sighs. aye, eve is nice.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 25

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    Ah..how lucky are you.?.you are with so much connectivity with this life making you together with it..love the joyful scenario you shared love it..well done..


  • MargaretG
    April 25

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    That is a beautiful photo! You were right to show us that, however far it was to go; the sunset over an ocean beach is magnificent, and "all's right with the world".
    I like the form's single verb in the middle line, and the harmony of similar rhymes throughout. Best of luck!

    • myrataal silver member
      April 25
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      I tried to capture the romance of that particular beach ...

      and yes: I planned every day carefully to give you the fullest impact of South Africa in the shortest time! We went from high to low; from west to east and west again; from inside to outside and back again ... up the mountains and down valleys ... And I know you landed within hearts.

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