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Broken Angel Wings

The wings once bright as a rainbows glow
become as ash
broken, torn, blacked and old
terror filled skies,
no longer blue
 the yellows, greens, the rainbows hue
gone now from this beautiful world
to the ashes of Hades
the River Styx, the dog Cerberus
all now hold the Broken Angel Wings
 
Time for the fairy bright
to come to the realm of old
Elven nights, pixie delights
settling into the green fields
soft petals of the daisy's
creatures playing in the daylight
fay at night
testing waters bright and blue
coming out in the morning dew
 
 
Her wings now singed and old
time for this to trans-fold
time for the fairy death
in her world of old
where is she goes after this
no one can tell you
some say that the Broken Angel Wings
hold them all so dear.
 
Broken Angel Wings now all gone
in a world gone array
dawn faded to dark
goodbye to the angel
that was once such a dear
no more longing to hold each near
holding on to the night now here
Heaven does not come for her
Hell is but a joke
Underworld is here.

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  • Has a nice flow, but filled with such sadness, great imagery. I do like the last two lines.

  • Hell is a Joke
    Underworld is here

    ...nice lines...great way to end it.

  • oh I llike

    love the rhyme scheme and the flow, many great phrases
    I enjoyed ths very much second to last stanza is my favorite
    Her wings now singed and old
    time for this to trans-fold
    time for the fairy death
    in her world of old
    where is she goes after this
    no one can tell you
    some say that the Broken Angel Wings
    hold them all so dear.

  • Wonderful and sad and full of wondrous imagery.. There is a metaphor here for what is happening to our own world.. Very nicely done..


  • toomysterious
    April 30
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    Full of great imagery, though the background did distract. Thank you for sharing this poem.


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 29

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    Thios is such a beautiful Angel poem In the beginning it seems a little sad. Thank you it was a pleasure to read.


  • trekkergirl
    April 29

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    I gotta say that I liked this... only one thing negative and it's not about your poem itself... but about the background. In places, the background made your poem difficult to read. Other than that I think your poem flowed lovely. I also liked the way that you phrased things... used imagery. All in all an excellent write. Thanks for sharing this with us.


  • Poison Blood
    April 27
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    So vivid and beautiful. Very very enticing. Excellent work.

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