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dark as night that falls
in gloom of winter’s chilled air
grieving heart that bleeds

brought far from joy
memories now stolen
tears fall in silence

looking for dawn’s light
in thoughts of grey bleakness
images of you

enveloped in pain
sadness rolling as mist
opened expression


Author notes

This is what grieving feels like to me!

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  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    May 4

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    ah very nice. Best of luck in Kevin's contest I hope your poem gets published in the next Allpoetry book


    -Steve-


    • Kathleen a Nazarene
      May 5
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      We'll see!

      I'll be up against some pretty steep competition I'm sure. Haven't had the time to check out the other poet's writes. Thanks for reading & your encouragement!


  • individuality gold member
    April 27

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    sighs of sorrow wrap the first verse, ah grief, it is hard but it is needed in life so we can cope with the dark ways that touch us.
    ah to wave at joy from the distance as drops salt the skin, silence whips spirits.
    insomnia crawls acreoss the carpet's colours as footsteps weave a brand new pattern.
    like a river's smoked ripples, seen from everywhere, windows wash dreams.

    good pieces.


    • Kathleen a Nazarene
      April 28
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      Thanks for reading

      and your comments. Yes, grieving is a necessary part of life & a healing process. You should form your comment into a poem, it's beautiful!


  • Draig aine gold member
    April 26

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    wow

    this is a departure for me to read this senyru chain ! your expression of grief is tangible and rings so true, well done my friend well done


    • Kathleen a Nazarene
      April 26
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      LOL....

      now that I look at this again...this is a combo Haiku/Senryu as I wrote about nature & emotions. I forget how I classed this in my PC file. I think I put it under Haiku Chain.
      Combos are OK right? Did I just invent something new? I doubt it...


    • Kathleen a Nazarene
      April 26
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      Doh?

      I'm really What do you mean Unhaiku write? Technically this is a Senryu Chain...[since to many don't differentiate I always put Haiku]. When I wrote this I wasn't sure how I felt it would come across, though I was feeling this as I wrote it! TY friend!


      • Draig aine gold member
        April 26
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        no not sad

        I just felt it transcended a standard haiku, even senyru, it is timeless, and powerful I read it in a gulp of air, not the stop start that are the hallmark of may ku, it flowed beyond the style I loved it, silly me for not phrasing correctly

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