Emotions still flowing
Five years later
Wonder if what we had
Really meant something
Wondering if things had gone differently
If I would be the same person
Broke my heart into a million pieces
Left me without closure
The least you could do is talk to me
Give me some sort of explanation
Even five years later
I wonder
Were we even meant to be?
You did to me
What you promised you wouldn’t
How do I get closure
And move on?
I still hold on to your gift
I wear it close to my heart
Many times I want to destroy it
But when I think about it
The day you gave it to me
How I felt I was on top of the world.
You stole my innocence
You hardened my heart
And I now realize that its because of you
Because how you treat me after we ended it
How you disrespected me
Played games with my emotions and my heart
Its because of you I cant love anymore
Author notes
Poem? I dont know.. venting yeah for sure
A contest entry
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I'm sure many can relate to this. I can myself in ways. One of the risks of falling in love is getting hurt. I could feel the pain. And venting sure does make you feel better!
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Oh this is so sad! I love it! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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Its good to have an honest rave against those who give you grief and you have done it so poetically with an ouch ...excellent spill dear poet
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you really struck a nerve with people on this one. most can relate from one direction or the other. it is not a good feeling either way. there are so many of us out there who never really get that explanation and therefore the closure we feel we need. all the cliches come to mind "what doesn't kill us only..." hard to see any of that in the moment...there is always a bigger picture being painted...good luck to you as you continue moving forward...peace to you always in all ways..
-Kendal
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I've been the guilty party before. Then I compounded the break-up by trying to put the blame on her...a hideous thing...finally after too long a time, I saw my guilt and admitted it, explained it to her, and accepted the blame I deserved. And I can see from this poem, that is all you want...is an honest explanation and an honest apology. It might not be enough, but it would be something.
Vent away, it's what humans do best.
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LIke it a lot
We learn. We move on. We love differently.
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this is excellent
this shows how you feel and I thank you and appreciate you for sharing it.
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Oh, a raw piece of poetry, the curtains are open and pain is an unwanted guest making itself comfortable rummaging through your personal space, closure can't come by way of explanation but by actions stationed at the right platform, hope you get a ticket to ride and catch a carriage that is full of new memories and moments you wish to keep. * heart hugs *
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Wonderfully written!!!!
How I hope your heart has mended and an new found sunshine is in your path.
This was a terrific write full of expression
and honesty.
Thank you for sharing this.
Take care
Love Peace
campanaro
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Fantastic Poetry!
This is poetry for sure don't worry. Reading this my insides churned and I felt almost ashamed to be a guy. The strength of emotions flows deep throughout the entire verse. "Its because of you I cant love anymore" is such a powerful line I would almost suggest keeping at as a separate stanza by itself. Similarly I love how you began by thrusting readers into the fray without any warning. I have read poems about hurt, betrayal and emotional destruction. Yours comes out on top. A wonderful piece.
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The subtle references to a broken heart, love betrayed, are strong in this piece. a very good vent. Venting helps clear the air of our mind and heart.
A very good write
Dee
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