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After the Party.

After the party
just me
and the moon



Andrew Hide
08~03~2004

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Inspired by Li Po's poem  oldpoetry.com/poetry/1395
Written March 8th, 2004

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  • Joe Spencer
    March 9, 2004
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    The emotions take hold, seen or unseen, and we are essentially all alone. With the Moon, we go within, and dare not let anyone - outside our most intimate circle - into our innermost souls, and even they may feel left out for a time. Fear can creep in if we have difficulty coming to terms with the feelings that hold us in their grip.

    The Moon is an essential part of you. the nagging desire that fuels your imagination, and the primal, natural forces of emotion that keep you alive.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    March 9, 2004
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    Thanks fo rthe link! Your haiku could be the end of his poem.
    Very creative and matches perfectly on Li Po's poem.
    I like haikus, and I really liked this one!
    Mari


  • BillS2
    March 8, 2004
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    Excellent

    Hi Andrew:
    Another wonderful creation from your hand for us to enjoy. I guess I missed the Party? Thanks. Bill


  • Ladybug
    March 8, 2004
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    nice reflection time....


  • Blondita
    March 8, 2004
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    Gosh...quite profound in its way Andrew...amazing what interpretations could be drawn from this...not a form of poetry I am too familiar with but you seem to have it close to perfection...

    Enjoyed...

    ~ sonia ~

  • Billbard silver member
    March 8, 2004
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    Andrew.Another good one.Bill


  • MuseStalker
    March 8, 2004
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    just lovely

    Few words, but the image is immense and profound. Reminiscent of parties past....yes. I've watched that moon.


  • March 8, 2004
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    an interesting haiku twist
    always enjoy reading, and seeing how many different roads
    traditional haiku can take
    you've managed to combine old with the new
    well done!
    ~liz


  • Emmerson
    March 8, 2004
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    Why do your haikus always make me smile? How many times have I done that!

    Lovely write

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