doggerel

what ever her name was
she was pretty,

not quite beautiful
but worthy of note

she wrote
innovative couplets
by the dozen
but it made no
difference -

no one would
ever see them

iii

she curled up and
played dirty scenes
from tacky movies
through her mind

then pretended
she had someone
to practice them on

a sigh became stuck
in her throat

and she left it
there to

rot

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A contest entry

It's not your fault you're stronger than the sky. by winterbound.. 400 points, ended May 17, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Prewrites; by ElectricBloom. 450 points, ended May 14, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Best Prewrites from April 2009 by Miss Faerie. 700 points, ended July 7, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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perfectsunset
July 7

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Wow this was absolutely stunning
and I sincerely think this should have
been awarded gold, most definitely.
I love everything here; the imagery,
the intense metaphor & depth, and
the meaning behind it.
This blew mine wayyy out of the
water

Congrats on the bronze,
but I'd have given it gold
VelvetWings
July 7

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This is a really beautiful though sorrowful piece. I enjoyed reading it, and thinking about the pieces as separate poems as well as parts of a whole. Congratulations on bronze in the contest!
~Sparrow
Miss Faerie
July 6

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Thank you for your Entry
I'd know your writing anywhere, you know.
This however, is exquisite. One of your best, I think.
Your words just twist and turn and you can't help feeling for the girl... waiting for someone to do more then read the words.

Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Shari
ElectricBloom
May 14

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i loved this.
such a brilliant ending.
this piece is short but you've managed to put so much into it and portray such a detatched emotion. beautiful imagery also.
excellent work

ElectricBloom
TabbyCat
May 1

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Wow. This is really, really good. You've created someone here. A girl I actually felt like I could relate to, because she was so very real. To say so much without actually saying it...that is art. The ending choked me up...
still.she.waits
April 29
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Young Confusions
April 29

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Wow, I agree with everyone else, beautiful..and sexy in a classy sorta way. Good stuff
maktub
April 29

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whew. you have a gift. Saw it again, right there before my eyes. WOW. Just sort of hits me in the chest, weaves its way into my imagination. Really, REALLY enjoyed this.

Smile♫
jacklaa
April 29

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this was really really good. i love the part where it says not quite beautiful but worthy of note. well your poem really is beautiful. i loved it
winterbound.
April 24

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Your prompt is:
That is, at least not until you quit
Taking their air as your own
For such a pretty girl
You give it an awfully, an awfully dirty home

If you can't work with it you may ask for another