Years of curiosity
Constantly, Forceably
Eager and indefinately longing for the one.
Every single day until mine are done.
I have no choice but to run.
I haven't come to a dead end yet.
I simply go through the brick walls.
My mind is too fast for my body.
There's a tiresome weight forcing me to trip and fall
I thought I knew it all,
Simplicity easily caught my eye.
But naturally I have an unquenchable thirst for more.
I should have been smarter and closed my door.
A young girl should not want more
The borderline between fantasy and reality doesn't always cross my mind.
*Sigh It's just...
Pretty eyes, lovely smile, at first all nice and kind.
It's just the same thing each time.
Much sweeter than any rhyme.
Instead of going foward, I go backwards.
Uninteresting lessons unlearned,
Pain and concequences churn.
Author notes
This poem actually means a lot to me. This is just what I have so far and constructed criticism is minimal of what I need. I really want to finish the poem ASAP. If you would like to know the real meaning of this poem, then message me.
While reading this poem think of "underaged", "guilt", and "Illegal"
Please don't assume sex.
Might help you, idk.
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nicely written. I do have one suggestion. Break up your write into either stanza's or paragraphs. This gives the reader a breather to think about what they have read. Nicely written. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this contest.
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A Finalist, Very Very Good job
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Hebz -
A sad little poem showing pain and tears
Negative emptiness too much for your young years
Never give in to despair and deepest sorrow
Cliched tho it is, look forward embracing tomorrow
The thing about guilt is accepting or saying sorry
To get past this step reduces all worry
And if in doubt cast your eyes high above
Know in your heart exists pure love
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Dear LadyRay: To me it seems finishd already. Love how you have expressed yourself with this poem. I can feel your true emotions clearly! Love,Janjan xoxo
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Young poet
Life at times seems so trying and mistakes are always going to be made. to learn and move forward is the key. Drop that weight and be kind and gentle to yourself. Gutsy write poet. Well done. Pen on.
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Ahh..what a thoughtful story you narrated.,..this is very curious and very deep as well..love the message around the words..well done...
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Thanks a plenty
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