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Sneaky.

I'll drink from your water
    if you'll drink from my grave;


And maybe,
    one day we'll recreate this blistering hell we've made.

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  • David. Enjoy.
    April 28

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    Something doesn't resonate about this piece...I'll be back with what it is exactly...cause I can't point it out right now.


    • Fireworks
      April 28
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      I call it writer's block and posting for the sake of posting.

      But that's just me.

  • ZachofDoom
    April 26
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    rofl. I've notticed the sudden burst in short poem.


    • Fireworks
      April 26
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      No, this is only the first.


      The other one was incomplete.


  • Nuclear
    April 24
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    Hmmm.

    I hate blisters.

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