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Wings Of Change

Young Enthusiastic Blood
Perhaps,a sign of a exciting turf,
Glinting in the high rise skies ,
As she swiftly flew away,

to a place of her command ,
so pretty .

Decked in white elegance ,
with a pale,affectionate pallor ,
I visualized her so rightfully ,
she watched,such ancient eyes,
walking calmly, carefully ,gracefully,

so beautiful .

 

 

Author notes

The Two Main stages of a woman - Youth and Old Age -

During the time of her young dynamic life ,she is an excited ,enthusiastic bird who wants to fly away and spread her wings to show the world what she's made of .

During old age she is a wise ,elegant angel filled with calmness , grace and experience of what life showed her .She loves how she lived and she displays it through her well read eyes showing peace and serenity.

 

 They Both Display a sheer and vivid contrast .

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  • bonjourbunnie
    April 24

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    The first stanza is good. I like the flow and images, however, "a exciting turf" should be an exciting turf.

    The poems charm continues into the second stanza, and I really love how it evolves into what could be a love poem.

    Over all, I really like your idea for the piece. It fits wonderfully with what a woman is; both stages of her lifetime are well portrayed and pleasing to read. Good write


  • Denerica silver member
    April 24

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    Such dynamics, clever piece, second line, you have a instead of an in front of the word exciting. Blessings.