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For Ophelia

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In blue moonlight where Lady Ophelia drifts
the whispered streams in winter's beauty, her eyes
reflecting starlight vaguely float and fade
quietly to grey.

As the breeze kisses her soft white breasts, she sighs
 a zephyr to carry her to sleeping worlds
where soporific trees roam the joyful earth
and a goddess dreams.

The curve of her cherry lips that still the dark
waters of a Bardic heart as a poet
feasts at the perked teat of her inspiration
and suspires the breeze.

By starlit springs that let a bard sail rivers
to the shadow lands with flesh perfumed blooms
and perceptions of ancient dreams fall back to
slumber in her arms.

 

 

Author notes

Artwork: 'Ophelia (Lying in a Meadow)' by JW Waterhouse
(from the Andrew Lloyd Webber Collection).

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  • pozo
    April 27

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    I cant read this

    MY dog ate my eyes, but never the less.

    Iiiiiii'm stilllllllllll in a dream

    snaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaakeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaater


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    April 27

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    This is a beautiful poem, with rich imagery and emotion. Certainly worth the clicking

    Keep up the great work, my friend.

    Maria


  • Menna
    April 26

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    I think this is a good poem, speaking in the way you used language and verse. However in my personal opinion this is very sexualizing Ophelia and not like her true nature, however this is my own personal opinion. However as I say nice structure and vocabulary.


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 26

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    Wow this is awsome write. Breeze kisse her white soft breast. That line jumped out at me. This was aq pleasure to read.


  • Antipodi
    April 26

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    tis a classic subject and a wonderful classic write dear poet this has such wonderful sensual emotions swirling through the beautiful imagery your verse has created excellent write

  • calmed nerves
    April 26
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    beautiful! Waterhouse is an amazing artist and your poem fits with painting perfectly!


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 26
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    This is a really good write you have here, This is wonderfully written and it was very much a pleasure to read.


  • Wolfdog silver member
    April 26

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

  • Purrsanthema
    April 25
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    I love Waterhouse's works, and your lovely poem is a beautiful complement to it.


  • BearWoman gold member
    April 25
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    Very erotic. Beautiful.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 24

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    Jem, you impart extra freedom to the Loose Sapphic form. I know of know other poet who has taken to this form to the extent that you have. Your trademark here is enjambement...

    *pauses for a swig of Lucozade*

    ... which is not something I considered before as effective within the form; but it's at the heart of your freer approach.

    And yet there is a hint of hidden structure too. It may not have been deliberate, but there is a pause for breath followed by two similarly-stressed syllables and an end rhyme - that links lines 2 and 5.

    In line 14 you need to hyphenate "flesh-perfumed" and make it compound.

    I like this very much.

    • Thanks Sis

      The hidden structure wasn't a concious thing.

      I like the form for JWW seems to reflect his style of painting.

  • beautiful


  • beckystar
    April 24
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    Incredible imagery!


  • Ligeia
    April 24

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    This is brilliant, your imagery is beautiful.
    I can see Ophelia in my mind's eye, and feel the breeze as if it were flowing over my own skin.
    I'm in love with this poem, keep up the good work.
    I'd make this comment much longer, but I'm far too awe-struck.
    I hope you'll forgive me!

    • Thank you Ligeia

      No need for a long comment as long as you enjoyed the poem.

  • poetrynovice
    April 24
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    Well Done!

    Your use of imagery and descriptive language is truly inspirational. Thanks for sharing.


  • wynd-fyre
    April 24
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  • nice

    it was a really good poem!wonderful imagery,the first line itself was so riveting!good work


  • maralisa silver member
    April 24
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    aw this is beautiful thank you for sharing maralisa


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    April 24

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    well...well...well... Where might I find Miss Ophelia?? your description is heaven! I loved your poem, picture...all on the verge of soft erotica but never really crossing that line...making for the perfect romantic adventure through words and ambiance! thanks for sharing your vision with us today. keep up the awesome work...peace to you always in all ways...
    -Kendal

    • Thank you Kendal.

      I wish I could tell you where she is! No one knows who she was.


  • XLadyElinorX
    April 24

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    wonderful loose sapphics, friend poet. I consider this write to be all perfect. . . beautiful imagery and flow. And I love the painting. . . Very well penned, indeed.

    ♠ Lady Elinor

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